set-up the central idea that things look OK in Barkedu until you look below the surface
Draw brighter lines on who the main characters are get to know them better. who are they. why are we hearing from them- for example, no one knew we were hearing from the paramount chief in the story.
does the structure make sense- is there a predictable pattern that users can latch on to for orientation. e.g. (for the introduction of each new section or idea do we lead with a narrative audio clip from a main character?)
Design
Do users understand how the narrative audio player works?- do they replay the clip. is there a desire to scrub the clip
Assess the legibility of the text on the slides
Do users understand the role of sound in this experience from the beginning.
Proposed editorial changes
See the body in the intro from the September burial.
Move taro worman up in the story before we hear from the paramount chief.
Use the voices of women singing at the burial to open the story.
Editorial
Design
Proposed editorial changes