This mod is based on the 0.601 ECV. This is currently classified as a mod but will actually evolve into a full new version due to the complete clean-up and restructuring of the original code.
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3a)fixed value than to fixed value that
3b)Various food has different impact on this to Various foods have different impacts on this
3c) Releaxing also to Relaxing also
3d) This is more an opinon, i think thus it is not implement consequently yet should be though it is not implemented consequently yet.
https://image.ibb.co/kYF05Q/Screenshot_34.png (3a)
https://image.ibb.co/dByys5/Screenshot_35.png (3b)
5) Another opinon coming from some one who loves to write:
You accompany it with a mug of tea to: With your meal you had a generously sized mug of tea
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6) Comma errors and writer opinon:
Original:
You enjoy a small tasty, but somewhat fattening, snack. It wasn't very much food, and you had to force yourself to finish and now you feel stuffed.
What i think it should be:
You enjoy a small,tasty,somewhat fattening snack. You weren't that hungry to begin with, so you had to force youself to finish, leaving you feeling stuffed.
https://image.ibb.co/hXm7kQ/Screenshot_38.png
8) Writer opinon(There is repeated to often to make for good writing with appeal and 'flow'):
Original:
You live in one of the apartment blocks in an old part of Pavlovsk, and the door to the apartment building is right there. Your parents' home is on the second floor there.
What i think:
In one of the older parts of Pavlovsk, lies your apartment building. Within it, you can find your parents' apartment on the second floor.
https://image.ibb.co/b2B7kQ/Screenshot_41.png
Submitter: 673751 1) Activities is spelled wrong: https://image.ibb.co/nQ3L5Q/Screenshot_32.png
2) Assume is missing its a: https://image.ibb.co/gt9SkQ/Screenshot_33.png
3) 3a)fixed value than to fixed value that 3b)Various food has different impact on this to Various foods have different impacts on this 3c) Releaxing also to Relaxing also 3d) This is more an opinon, i think thus it is not implement consequently yet should be though it is not implemented consequently yet. https://image.ibb.co/kYF05Q/Screenshot_34.png (3a) https://image.ibb.co/dByys5/Screenshot_35.png (3b)
4) to lowest value to: to the lowest value https://image.ibb.co/gY8bek/Screenshot_36.png
5) Another opinon coming from some one who loves to write: You accompany it with a mug of tea to: With your meal you had a generously sized mug of tea https://image.ibb.co/dzOWC5/Screenshot_37.png
6) Comma errors and writer opinon: Original: You enjoy a small tasty, but somewhat fattening, snack. It wasn't very much food, and you had to force yourself to finish and now you feel stuffed.
What i think it should be: You enjoy a small,tasty,somewhat fattening snack. You weren't that hungry to begin with, so you had to force youself to finish, leaving you feeling stuffed. https://image.ibb.co/hXm7kQ/Screenshot_38.png
7) Exhibitionism should be captialized with the rest of the attributes https://image.ibb.co/ksHf5Q/Screenshot_40.png
8) Writer opinon(There is repeated to often to make for good writing with appeal and 'flow'): Original: You live in one of the apartment blocks in an old part of Pavlovsk, and the door to the apartment building is right there. Your parents' home is on the second floor there.
What i think: In one of the older parts of Pavlovsk, lies your apartment building. Within it, you can find your parents' apartment on the second floor. https://image.ibb.co/b2B7kQ/Screenshot_41.png
9) Another opinon: Remove the and between clit and making you horny and add a comma. Looks like: clit, making you horny. https://image.ibb.co/m6M7kQ/Screenshot_42.png
10) Shouldn't Community centre be Community center? https://image.ibb.co/kuvskQ/Screenshot_44.png