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improve the introductory "welcome message" on the google group #87

Open kat opened 8 years ago

kat commented 8 years ago

It's quite longwinded and the language sounds a lot like the government talking rather than civil society. It doesn't emphasise/recognise the equal partners partnership that's a core to the OGP

craigthomler commented 8 years ago

I wrote it :)

If someone wants to edit it down, please feel free.

I'll have another look in a few days, but better to not edit one's own work.

Cheers,

Craig


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On 2 February 2016 at 17:08, Kat notifications@github.com wrote:

It's quite longwinded and the language sounds a lot like the government talking rather than civil society It doesn't emphasise/recognise the equal partners partnership that's a core to the OGP

— Reply to this email directly or view it on GitHub https://github.com/AOGPN/opengovernment.org.au/issues/87.