Abstract: you’ve done a great job in tackling the objective of discussing the purpose of the C-NARC team. It’s concise and easy to follow. Good job
Introduction: you’ve done a good job expanding on the objectives of the team, the importance of the research and how it can be applied. You’ve stated your hypothesis well and this draft is a lot better. I would recommend adding a sentence or two explaining how you will be determining these relationships: ie explain how you will be first doing theoretical calculations and conducting experiments to confirm it.
Lit review: I would recommend working a bit on the establishing of definitions and words. An example of this is the fluid deformation in the start and the use of the word baffles. As members of AguaClara these may be easily understood, however, external people with no experience may not understand or be able to follow along. Overall this section is quite strong, solely work on ensuring this can be followed and terms are explained. Well done!
Methods: this section is very well written and quite easy to follow. The language is not to complex and each step follows along quite well. I would possible bold the titles for table and figures just to make them separated from text. Also good job in explaining the apparatus, it is well labeled and the explanation of the flow of water is well described. For your procedure, the image of the procoda set up seems broken, make sure to check this. Additionally, explain, if possible, why the 20 NTU was chosen as the influent.
Results: well done in this section. You’ve taken all the feedback and implemented it in a coherent way. I would recommend comparing figure 7 to any hypothetical graphs of what the expected NTU through the system based on the assumption that coagulant is proportional to the clay.
Conclusion: good job in this section. It is very important you reconnect your conclusions to the hypothesis at the start of the semester – either confirm it, disprove it or explain what changed in intentions/what you ended up researching and why. Be explicit about this.
Future work: you’ve done a good job laying out tasks that need to be done to progress the research. Good job.
Overall, awesome job with your report! Just some minor changes need to be made.
Hey guys, here is some feedback on your report!
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