Student Review of Thesis ver 1.1.1

[boulais01]

Jan 20, 2024 - Jan 25, 2024

I lack the frame of reference necessary to know which order tasks are being completed in, and therefore am likely to include comments that have already been given or are in the process of being addressed.

Overview: This paper is, by my assessment, nicely readable for those outside the work. The elements are each explained well/thoroughly and these elements are built in such a way that one leads into the other neatly. This extends into the proposed solution, showing the well-considered logical path to the declared research, continuing in such a manner that it is clear even to one inexperienced with the systems and methods used in the work..

Grammatical/Sentence Level Notes: pg4, Motivation. The choice of the word obscure in the second sentence seems to be at odd with the statements surrounding it.

pg6, Motivation. In the last complete sentence on this page, Such high usage of fossil fuels points to one clear solution, the implementation of rapidly growing, low-carbon energy sources, which take the form of renewables like wind and solar I suspect that a semicolon in place of the first comma would work better.

pg7, Goals of the Project. The first sentence could perhaps be benefited either by changing the large collection to a large collection, or by changing it to the large (number/amount), though the word collection is likely of some significance and this change may ultimately be counter-productive.

pg10, Related Work. The first sentence of this section could benefit by the removal of the comma between the words prominent and existing.

pg12, Existing Tools. The first full sentence on this page uses both the word Regardless and the word however in close proximity, making it loop around itself.

pg12, Existing Tools. The first sentence the second paragraph says A large focus of many of the tools in this field are heavily focused, which is a bit convoluted for the wording.

pg15, Proposed Solutions. Potentially unnecessary comma in the second sentence of the first paragraph, in NREL’s SAM, or PVsyst utilizes.

pg16, Proposed Solutions. The third full sentence on the page contains a potentially unnecessary comma in where possible, would lead.

[gkapfham]

Hello @AidanNeeson, if you have resolved this issue can you please respond and then close it appropriately

[AidanNeeson]

@boulais01 Thanks for the feedback! I implemented the feedback for the first two chapters you suggested above. Grammar is clearly not my strong suit!