I think the introduction is slightly on the longer side and certain parts of it can be condensed.
This paper is organized as follows: first discussing the data Section , we describing the methodological approach, including data sourcing and analytical tools; then, presenting our results in the detail Section ; we discuss our findings in the context of previous research, pointing out the limitations of our study as well as its societal implications; finally, In the discussion Section is suggestion for future directions of research, stressing the significance of looking into the underlying causes of changing fertility patterns and their effects on society.
This paragraph is essentially one run on sentence and can be shorten for better readability.
Also notice there is a typo " "... finally, In the ..." There should be a period here instead of a comma.
My recommendation
The paper is organized with a data, results and discussion section. In the data section, we describe the methodological approach, in the results section we show our analysis with descriptive figures, and finally, in the discussion section we discuss the results with context of the previous research.
Data:
The data section is strong and descriptive. Well done.
Results:
The placement of the graphs is a bit inconsistent. The descriptive paragraph relating to each paragraph is above the figures for some of them and bellow the figures for the other ones. Picking one ordering can make the paper a bit more readable.
Discussion
You should call back to the figures within the discussion as evidence for you conclusions based on the results. Doing this creates a stronger discussion.
Introduction:
I think the introduction is slightly on the longer side and certain parts of it can be condensed.
This paragraph is essentially one run on sentence and can be shorten for better readability. Also notice there is a typo " "... finally, In the ..." There should be a period here instead of a comma.
My recommendation The paper is organized with a data, results and discussion section. In the data section, we describe the methodological approach, in the results section we show our analysis with descriptive figures, and finally, in the discussion section we discuss the results with context of the previous research.
Data:
The data section is strong and descriptive. Well done.
Results:
The placement of the graphs is a bit inconsistent. The descriptive paragraph relating to each paragraph is above the figures for some of them and bellow the figures for the other ones. Picking one ordering can make the paper a bit more readable.
Discussion
You should call back to the figures within the discussion as evidence for you conclusions based on the results. Doing this creates a stronger discussion.