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Editorial Comments 11 Jan 24 (CCitC Guidance dated 2 Jan 24) #134

Closed ecbconnor closed 8 months ago

ecbconnor commented 8 months ago

  1. Use of i.e. versus e.g.

    • p 13, para 4, 2nd last line replace "attack vectors. I.e. service portal" by "attack vectors, e.g., service portal"
    • p 14, para 3, 2nd last line replace "attack vectors. I.e. service portal" by "attack vectors, e.g., service portal"
    • p 27, bullet 2, sub bullet 1, replace "device (i.e. firewall)" by "device (e.g., a firewall)"
    • p 38, para 3, last line replace "attack vectors. I.e. service portal" by "attack vectors, e.g., service portal"
    • check all instance of the use of e.g. that it is followed by a comma - search for "e.g. " and replace by "e.g., "

  2. Use of between versus among, et al

    • p 11, title, replace "Relationships Between the TOE" by "Relationships Among the TOE"
    • p11, first line replace "relationships between these entities" by "relationships among these entities"
    • p 23, first para, line 3 replace "environments between government or commercial" by "environments for government and commercial"
    • p 28, 3rd para, first sentence replace "identical between PPs" by "identical among PPs"; second sentence replace "wording between them" by "wording among them"
    • p 32, para 6, last line replace "presentation between technology types" by "presentation across technology types"
    • p 41, Hybrid Cloud, last line replace "balancing between clouds" by "balancing among clouds"

  3. Working Group versus Technical Community

    • p 28, para 4 replace "CCitC working group" by "CCitC Technical Community"
    • p 32, para 6 first line replace "CC in the Cloud working group" by "CCitC Technical Community"

  4. p 29, third para, line 1, remove the comma after "MDM PP"

  5. p 29, Class ADV, third line replace "discussion" by "discussions"

  6. p 30, last para, line1 replace "One the assumptions" by "Once the assumptions"

  7. p 31, para 2, line 1 replace "CC in the Cloud" by "CCitC"; lines 1 and 2 replace "validation" by "certification" ("validation" is only used in the US)

  8. p 31, para 7, states "Generally within the PP’s proposed, the Network Device and Application Software PPs are used the most." - not understood what is meant? ND PP does not appear in the Appendix. "are used the most" for what?

  9. p 31, para 8 second last line replace "but this not considered" by "but this is not considered"

  10. Throughout document replace "Security Objectives of the Operating Environment" by "Security Objectives for the Operational Environment" - correct CC term - 10 instances

  11. More to come

bharveyTX commented 8 months ago

All changes implemented.