Open schottr1 opened 4 years ago
While I understand the issue you are raising, the first sentence of the proposed solution is, I fear, too complex to understand. While it probably needs a better wordsmith than me, maybe something along the following lines might be better:
The process of collecting accurate, complete, and verifiable police incidence response data is hampered by any inaccuracies and false claims documented in the original police reports. In addition, the lack of adequate and unbiased review and analysis of the incidence, and clarity and transparency in identifying systemic issues both in reporting accuracy and behavior for an individual or group of individual police officers, leads to further degradation in the quality of the response data. Since the appropriate parties that provide management oversight, and compliance verification also depend on the quality of this data, their ability to provide governance is significantly reduced. These problems are caused by the following issues:
<then the 3 points you had suggested>
Is your suggestion related to a problem? Please describe. It is important that the problem statement be written with clarity so the solutions being proposed and assessed can be evaluated effectively. I feel that the Problem Statement # 2 and associated hill needs to be revised to clearly state the user base and objective. Below is the current Problem Statement:
This statement identifies two different but related issues:
The one Hill described doesn’t address the identified problem. It proposes using “technology to screen and expedite police reports for inherent biases while flagging incident reports for immediate review so that issues/incidents are addressed proactively with immediate consequences.” The problem statement identifies the lack of transparency and accuracy of available data and the ability for police reports to be falsified or inaccurate. It does not identify any issues with inherent bias being a cause for either of these two issues.
What is your proposed solution? Revise the Problem Statement to be the following:
We would develop a Hill for each of the above three potential issues.
What is the impact of your solution Revising the Problem Statement and Hills will lead to better alignment of the proposed solution(s) to the problem statement.