The sentence that begins In fact, I would encourage you to fill out the survey even more: we need to hear... is "OK", but it lands awkwardly.
As written, readers may associate "even more" with filling out the survey. In the sense of one doing "more filling" as opposed to "less filling" on the survey. I don't think that is your intent.
I believe your intent is associate "even more" with your encouragement. So - not wanting to word-smith here - perhaps something along these lines would work.
In fact, I encourage you even more strongly to fill out the survey: we need to hear...
As I noted, this is subjective in some sense. And - important to note - the existing sentence will suffice. We're just polishing the gem here.
The typo is here: …and all folks who provided early feedback throuhgout the process where throughout is misspelled.
The sentence that begins
In fact, I would encourage you to fill out the survey even more: we need to hear...
is "OK", but it lands awkwardly.As written, readers may associate "even more" with filling out the survey. In the sense of one doing "more filling" as opposed to "less filling" on the survey. I don't think that is your intent.
I believe your intent is associate "even more" with your encouragement. So - not wanting to word-smith here - perhaps something along these lines would work.
In fact, I encourage you even more strongly to fill out the survey: we need to hear...
As I noted, this is subjective in some sense. And - important to note - the existing sentence will suffice. We're just polishing the gem here.
The typo is here:
…and all folks who provided early feedback throuhgout the process
where throughout is misspelled.Thank you and thank you your work on the survey.