Art fix -- Aadan should be in http://robgungor.com/tutorial/#french_Story3_57_previous_abcjl not Sam

[MediaSmarts]

French only -- English is OK

[eternitybro]

[eternitybro]

let me know if this is good.

[MediaSmarts]

Again, should be Aadan (older) not Sam (younger). Is correct in the English, so John should just need to take the French poster text and paste it on the English graphics.

[jmseck]

@robgungor Rob did you receive my correction for this also?

[jmseck]

@robgungor @MediaSmarts Rob, please update me on this one. Did you receive a correction for this and #158?

[eternitybro]

I'm seeing the same scene in both french and english.

[eternitybro]

Here's what I see in french and english:

[jmseck]

@robgungor Ok thanks, I'll have the corrections for you shortly.

[jmseck]

@robgungor @MediaSmarts Here are the revisions

[MediaSmarts]

The first three panels look good. The fourth panel (http://robgungor.com/tutorial/#french_Story3_63_previous_abcjl) should have Sam as in the previous version.

Script:

PAGE ONE

Panel 1 g_3_12_1_1 Medium shot of Sam and Aadan on the couch. Aadan is using the console controller.

e_3_10_1_2_1 DESCRIBED VIDEO: We see Sam and Aadan sitting together on the couch.

e_3_12_1_1_2 AADAN: Okay, we’ll talk to a teacher about this on Monday.

Panel 2 e_3_12_1_2 Medium long-shot of a school hallway. Aadan is talking to a teacher, Mr. Byrne. Sam is hanging back a bit, kind of hiding behind Aadan. On the wall behind them is a poster that reads:

DID YOU KNOW? THREE IN FOUR CANADIAN STUDENTS HAVE NEVER BEEN MEAN TO ANYONE ONLINE

f_3_12_1_2 Medium long-shot of a school hallway. Aadan is talking to a teacher, Mr. Byrne. Sam is hanging back a bit, kind of hiding behind Aadan.

e_3_12_1_2_1 DESCRIBED VIDEO: We see a school hallway. Aadan is talking to a teacher, Mr. Byrne. Sam is hanging back a bit, kind of hiding behind Aadan.

e_3_12_1_2_2 CAPTION: Later…

e_3_12_1_2_3 AADAN: Hey Mister Byrne, can I talk to you for a minute?

e_3_12_1_2_4 BYRNE: Sure, Aadan. What’s up?

Panel 3 g_3_12_1_3 Tighter on Aadan and Mr. Byrne.

e_3_12_1_3_1 DESCRIBED VIDEO: We see Aadan and Mr. Byrne talking.

e_3_12_1_3_2 AADAN: It’s my brother Sam. I think there’s some people bullying him in UniSaurus Realms and maybe here at school too.

e_3_12_1_3_3 BYRNE: I’m sorry to hear that, but I’m glad you told me about it.

Panel 4

g_3_12_1_4 Close-up on Sam. He’s looking away slightly, not wanting to make eye contact with Mr. Byrne.

e_3_12_1_4_1 DESCRIBED VIDEO: We see Sam looking away slightly.

e_3_12_1_4_2 SAM: It’s this girl Laura, in Aadan’s grade. When I was on Realms she told me that nobody wants to play with me.

[jmseck]

@MediaSmarts So just to clarify: Panel 4 is the only panel that has to change, to have Sam instead of Aadan? Do we need to see Sam in panels 2, 3 also?

[MediaSmarts]

@jmseck Yes, only panel 4 has to change.

[jmseck]

ok thanks

[jmseck]

@MediaSmarts I added Sam into the 2 previous frames. I felt it helped the continuity. Let me know if you think this works and I'll format all the images out for final upload.

[MediaSmarts]

@jmseck Looks great!

[jmseck]

@MediaSmarts Thanks we'll get that integrated.

[jmseck]

@robgungor Rob approved corrections have been forwarded to you via email. For this and #158.

[eternitybro]

up on the server, please verify @MediaSmarts.