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[petergault]

From Samantha Lasky: I think this video is a good start. Some thoughts/comments:

• the starting voiceover is a little jarring/starts right in
• the little boy is great, but hard to understand. May be better if you can decrease the background noise
• you should say something about it being for kids of all ages or grades x-y b/c right now people will assume it's just for young kids
• you should have a call to action or at least the website on your closing screen
• I love all the kids yelling Quill at the end!!

[petergault]

From Peg Tyre:

The video — pretty good.The tv correspondent in me wanted a bit more content—It feels like for a minute of my life, all I get is pictures of white kids and folksy sound.

My take: Keep with your intro.

blah blah. …..not able to write in college. Now get down to brass tacks: "Quill improves writing skills by SPECIFIC AND SPECIFIC EXAMPLE. Here’s how it work— we should actually see on the screen examples of the exercises.

Then the teacher bite.

Then out — I love the nat sound kids shouting QUILL!

I love Elliot’s narration.