shawn-hy1232
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3 years ago Good!
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'My hobby is watch a movie.' -> There is something wrong with this. Tell me what it should be. (Leave a comment below)
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'She likes to draw pictures.' -> 'She likes to draw.'
- The phrase 'To draw' already contains what you meant. So the word 'pictures' is unnecessary in here.
Let's make this one paragraph into three.
My name is Yoohyeon. I am a student. My hobby is watch a movie. My favorite food is fried chicken. I'm interested in stocks these days.
And I would like to introduce my family. My sister is in college. She likes to draw pictures. My mom likes to cook. My mom is good at cooking. She is kind. My father's hobby is reading books. He likes to play golf. My family is harmonious. I love my family.
And I would like to introduce my favorite drama. My favorite drama is so many. So I would like to introduce only two. First, My favorite drama is Kingdom. Kingdom is a zombie drama. It is so fun. Second, my favorite drama is Stranger things. Stranger things is superpower and monster drama. It is very interesting. My favorite movie is the Avengers series. It is very interesting.
kanguhyeon
일기 쓰기 팁!: 일기는 간단하게 - 에세이가 아닙니다. 시제(tense)를 알맞게 써주세요! 일기는 주로 과거에 일어난 일을 쓰는 것이기 때문에 과거 시제로! 하지만 상황에 따라 다양한 시제를 사용할 수도 있습니다.
주의할 점!: 삼인칭 (he, she, it, 등등) 주어를 쓸 때 동사 원형에 s 붙이는 것을 주의 합니다. 항상은 아니지만 대부분 명사 앞에 관사 (article)이 붙습니다. 어떠한 관사를 쓸 것인지 항상 고민하면서 써보세요.
My name is Yoohyeon. I am a student. My hobby is watching movies. My favorite food is fried chicken. I'm interested in stocks these days. And I would like to introduce my family. My sister is in college. She likes to draw. My mom likes to cook. My mom is good at cooking. She is kind. My father's hobby is reading books. He likes to play golf. My family is harmonious. I love my family. And I would like to introduce my favorite drama. My favorite drama is so many. So I would like to introduce only two. First, my favorite drama is Kingdom. Kingdom is a zombie drama. It is so fun. Second, my favorite drama is Stranger Things. Stranger Things is superpower and monster drama. It is very interesting. My favorite movie is the Avengers series. It is very interesting.