[민지우] - 2021년 3월 3일

[jiwoo0205]

• 일기 쓰기 팁!: 일기는 간단하게 - 에세이가 아닙니다. 시제(tense)를 알맞게 써주세요! 일기는 주로 과거에 일어난 일을 쓰는 것이기 때문에 과거 시제로! 하지만 상황에 따라 다양한 시제를 사용할 수도 있습니다.

• 주의할 점!: 삼인칭 (he, she, it, 등등) 주어를 쓸 때 동사 원형에 s 붙이는 것을 주의 합니다. 항상은 아니지만 대부분 명사 앞에 관사 (article)이 붙습니다. 어떠한 관사를 쓸 것인지 항상 고민하면서 써보세요.

I went to school at 8:20am. My class was too cold. I wanted to turn on a heather. But my teacher did not bring the heather remote. We ate lunch at 11am. I was very hungry, but I did not eat a lot. Because, It was bad today. And my class ended at 4:20pm. My friends and I wanted to lie in bed right now. So I went home. Mango and I took a break in my bed. A few hours later, I went to Talk-Talk. I studied about Phrase. After the class, I came back home and I packed my stuff about spoon,water. I wait for the weekend.

[shawn-hy1232]

Good!

1. 'My class was too cold.' -> 'My classroom was too cold.'

2. 'But my teacher did not bring the heather remote.' -> 'But my teacher didn't bring the remote control for the heater.'

3. 'Because, It was bad today.' -> 'Because I didn't like the food.'

   • 여기서 'the food'라고 했기 때문에 'the'를 붙임으로써 오늘 점심에 나온 그 음식을 말하는 것이 됨!

4. 'My friends and I wanted to lie in bed right now.' -> 'My friends and I were really tired. I wanted to lie in a bed.'

5. 'I studied about Phrase.' -> 'I learned about different phrases.'

6. 'I packed my stuff about spoon,water.' -> 'I packed my stuff.' or 'I packed my spoon and my water bottle.'