[조소영] - 2021년 1월 11일

[Josoh]

• 일기 쓰기 팁!: 일기는 간단하게 - 에세이가 아닙니다. 시제(tense)를 알맞게 써주세요! 일기는 주로 과거에 일어난 일을 쓰는 것이기 때문에 과거 시제로! 하지만 상황에 따라 다양한 시제를 사용할 수도 있습니다.

• 주의할 점!: 삼인칭 (he, she, it, 등등) 주어를 쓸 때 동사 원형에 s 붙이는 것을 주의 합니다. 항상은 아니지만 대부분 명사 앞에 관사 (article)이 붙습니다. 어떠한 관사를 쓸 것인지 항상 고민하면서 써보세요.

I went to a department store to get my imprinted wallet which I bought yesterday. Until I went to work, I had some time left so I enerted a clothing store. I looked around whether there were clothes that look good on me. Finally, I found out a cute gray sweater. It was not only cute but also on sale. I tried that and I was satisfied with it. So I bought it. It is always happy to spend money. After thought students for 3 hours I came home. My friend who lived near visited me with a cake baked by herself because tomorrow is my birthday. Her cake was sweet and moist. We ate up all while we watched TV. I looked forward the next day because it was my birthday. I was always excited on my birthday because I could eat something delicious and do something special.

[shawn-hy1232]

Great work!

Just few things:

1. 'After thought students for 3 hours'? -> Did you mean 'After teaching students for 3 hours'?

2. 'I looked forward the next day' -> 'I look forward to the next day'

   You have to put the preposition 'to'. You have to make it present tense, otherwise it sounds like you did look forward to it but not anymore.

3. 'I was always excited on my birthday because I could eat something delicious and do something special.' -> 'I always get excited for my birthday because I can eat ....'

   This should be the present tense as well. Same logic as the one above.