shawn-hy1232
commented
3 years ago Good!
-
'mam' -> 'mom'
-
'at the concert hall' -> 'at 서울아트 concert hall' 여기서는 'a' 를 사용하지 않는것이 맞아요. 왜냐면 특정한 곳을 갔기 때문이에요. 하지만 그렇다고해서 처음부터 '그 콘서트 홀에서 만났다'라고 하면 듣는사람은 '그 콘서트홀'이 어딘지 모르기 때문에 콘서트홀의 이름을 적어줘야 합니다.
-
'we watch a musical.' -> 'we watched the show.'
-
'We were so expect.' -> ??
-
'The actors voice were sounds good and they were look perpect.' -> 'The actors performed really well.
-
'We were fun.' -> 'It was fun.' -그 쇼가 재미있었다- 이기 때문에 주어가 The show 또는 It.
-
'After watch a musical, we went to cafe and we drank coffee and cake.' -> 'After the show, we went to cafe and we had coffee and cake.'
-
'It was secret date with my mam.' -> 'it was a secret date with my mom.'
-
'I had to came back to seoul tonight.' -> 'I had to come back to Seoul tonight.'
-
'So we talked about a lot of self thtings.' -> ??
-
'I went back to airport' -> 'I went back to the airport.'
rita1201
일기 쓰기 팁!: 일기는 간단하게 - 에세이가 아닙니다. 시제(tense)를 알맞게 써주세요! 일기는 주로 과거에 일어난 일을 쓰는 것이기 때문에 과거 시제로! 하지만 상황에 따라 다양한 시제를 사용할 수도 있습니다.
주의할 점!: 삼인칭 (he, she, it, 등등) 주어를 쓸 때 동사 원형에 s 붙이는 것을 주의 합니다. 항상은 아니지만 대부분 명사 앞에 관사 (article)이 붙습니다. 어떠한 관사를 쓸 것인지 항상 고민하면서 써보세요.
I woke up at 7:40AM. I had to go to Busan in the morning. I took a taxi. Because I woke up late. I went to Busan and I met my mom at Dream Theater concert hall. I had to watch a musical performance with my mom. So I went to Busan. We got tickets and we had lunch. After lunch, we watched the show. The musical name is Wikid. We were so excited. The actors performed really well. It was fun After the show, we went to cafe and we had coffee and cake. I was so happy because it was a secret date with my mom. I had to come back to Seoul tonight. We talked for a while. After we drank coffee, I went back to the airport And I studied English while I was waiting for the airplan. At 10PM, I came back to seoul and I came back to my house. I was tired but I was so happy today.