shawn-hy1232
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3 years ago Good!
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'we are planning to go to Seoul today.' -> 'we had to come back to Seoul today.'
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'Before we were starting, we promised to meet at Gangwha Island about for 3 pm.' -> Before we were starting?? -> 'We promised to meet at Ganhwa Island around 3pm.'
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'my family and my dad stopped by a rest store 2 times a day.' -> Cross it out
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'It was 7 hours from 거제 to 강화.' -> 'It took 7 hours from 거제 to 강화.'
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'I said my dad' -> 'I told my dad'
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'I want you to care of your health. As soon as possible, I want you to live together in my house.' -> 'I want you to take care of your health.'
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'And we took a shower and we had a can of beer each other.' -> 'And we took a shower and we had beer.'
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'After writing this diary. I am going to sleep soon.' -> 'After writing this diary, I am going to sleep.'
hichunhee
일기 쓰기 팁!: 일기는 간단하게 - 에세이가 아닙니다. 시제(tense)를 알맞게 써주세요! 일기는 주로 과거에 일어난 일을 쓰는 것이기 때문에 과거 시제로! 하지만 상황에 따라 다양한 시제를 사용할 수도 있습니다.
주의할 점!: 삼인칭 (he, she, it, 등등) 주어를 쓸 때 동사 원형에 s 붙이는 것을 주의 합니다. 항상은 아니지만 대부분 명사 앞에 관사 (article)이 붙습니다. 어떠한 관사를 쓸 것인지 항상 고민하면서 써보세요.
I woke up 6:30 am. Because we had to come back to Seoul today. So, I quickly took a shower and grabbed my stuff. My dad and my sister went to eat breakfast. And other family members slept in. Around 7:40am, my families woke up and they grabbed their stuff. We left the resort at 8:15am.
Before we left the resort, we promised to meet at Gangwha Island around 3pm.
Around 3 pm, we met my sister's family at 동검갯벌장어 restaurant. It took 7 hours from 거제 to 강화. My families had grilled eel for lunch. After lunch, we said goodbye. So, my sister's family went to Sedaemoongu. And my family and my dad went to Ilsan. After an hour, we arrived at my dad's house. I told my dad " Daddy ! I want you to take care of your health."
My family came back home. On the way home, we stopped by 감성글루밍 to pick up my dog. We unpacked our stuff. And we took a shower and we had beer.
I was so tired. After writing this diary. I am going to sleep.
Good night.