[Ruby] - 2021년 07월 09일 Fri.

[hichunhee]

• 일기 쓰기 팁!: 일기는 간단하게 - 에세이가 아닙니다. 시제(tense)를 알맞게 써주세요! 일기는 주로 과거에 일어난 일을 쓰는 것이기 때문에 과거 시제로! 하지만 상황에 따라 다양한 시제를 사용할 수도 있습니다.

• 주의할 점!: 삼인칭 (he, she, it, 등등) 주어를 쓸 때 동사 원형에 s 붙이는 것을 주의 합니다. 항상은 아니지만 대부분 명사 앞에 관사 (article)이 붙습니다. 어떠한 관사를 쓸 것인지 항상 고민하면서 써보세요.

I woke up and checked my phone. Github app was left open. So it was the first thing (that) I saw on my phone. I don't remember exactly, but I probably tried to read my diaries last night and just fell asleep. So I pressed the back button. Surprisingly, Shawn corrected my diary last night. I read Shawn's comment. But there were a lot of comments and a lot of wrong sentences. Anyway I am always thankful for his work. After reading Shawn's comment, I took a shower and I got dressed.

I had a half day off. Because my dad and I went to a hospital. There were a lot of people. So we waited over an hour. We met a doctor and my dad got to some tests. We left the hospital. We will go to the hospital again next week. I took a bus in front of the hospital. And I went to the nearest subway station. I took the subway, line number 3. While I was on the subway, I dozed off for few mins. Around 2 pm, I got off at Hakdong station. I walked to my office. On the way to my office, I picked up iced-latte. I worked like a bee.

Around 6pm, everyone in my office got off work. I checked Talk-Talk Academy's Instagram account. There were a lot of voice recordings. So I listened to them while I was signing some documents. I worked late.

Now, I am at my office. After writing this diary, I will get off work.

Good bye.

[shawn-hy1232]

Good!

1. 'When I wake up' -> 'When I woke up'

2. 'My diary had opening the screen of my phone.' -> ??

3. 'with a happy feeling' -> Cross it out

4. 'I always thankful' -> 'I am always thankful'

5. 'I took a bus in front of the hospital to the nearest subway station.' -> 'I took a bus in front of the hospital. And I went to the nearest subway station.'

6. 'I took a subway line number 3.' -> 'I took the subway, line number 3.'

7. 'During taking the subway, I dozed off a few mins.' -> 'While I was on the subway, I dozed off for few mins.'

8. 'I arrived at my office. On the way to my office, I picked up iced-latte.' -> 문장의 순서가 논리적으로 올바르지 않습니다.

9. 'while I listening Talk-Talk academy's recording on the instargram.' -> Cross it out

'So, I signed some documents while I listening Talk-Talk academy's recording on the instargram.' 만약 저라면 위의 문장을 이렇게 구성할것 같습니다.

'I checked Talk-Talk Academy's Instagram account. There were a lot of voice recordings. So I listened to them while I was signing some documents.'

[hichunhee]

2. My diary had opening the screen of my phone.' -> ??

(전날 핸드폰에 깃허브 일기를 보려다가 잠들었는지 ) 일어났을 때 핸드폰에 작성한 일기화면이 열려? 있었다.

입니다.

여러번 수정했는데 의미 전달이 어려운거 같아요

[shawn-hy1232]

표현이 어려운 문장은 안쓰시면되요~ㅎㅎ

I woke up and checked my phone. Github app was left open. So it was the first thing (that) I saw on my phone. I don't remember exactly, but I probably tried to read my diaries last night and just fell asleep.

여기에 우리가 안배운 표현들과 문법들이 많아요. 예를 들어서 'Github app was left open' 은 2형식문장이고 S.C.에 과거분사구가 사용되었어요. 'the first thing (that) I saw on my phone' 에서는 that절이 어제 말씀드린 명사적 용법이 아니라 여기서는 형용사적 용법입니다. 이러처럼 아직 우리가 모르는 문법이 많기때문에 하고자하는 표현이 온전히 안될 경우가 많이 있을거에요. 지금 위에 말씀드린 표현이나 설명은 그냥 참고만 하시고 사용하지는 마세요~.