[Rita] - 2021년 8월 5일

[rita1201]

• 일기 쓰기 팁!: 일기는 간단하게 - 에세이가 아닙니다. 시제(tense)를 알맞게 써주세요! 일기는 주로 과거에 일어난 일을 쓰는 것이기 때문에 과거 시제로! 하지만 상황에 따라 다양한 시제를 사용할 수도 있습니다.

• 주의할 점!: 삼인칭 (he, she, it, 등등) 주어를 쓸 때 동사 원형에 s 붙이는 것을 주의 합니다. 항상은 아니지만 대부분 명사 앞에 관사 (article)이 붙습니다. 어떠한 관사를 쓸 것인지 항상 고민하면서 써보세요.

I woke up at 7:30AM. Before I go to work, I packed yogurt the refrigerator. The yogurt was my snack. I usually don't eat a snack. But my doctor told me to eat milk and fruit. And I have to try to eat at the same time everyday. Because it is for my health. Anyway, I went to work at 9AM. It was hot today but it was a little windy. I worked and I had 편백찜 for lunch with my boss and director. 편백찜 is steamed beef dish. After lunch, I bought a nutritional supplement at the mart.

I came back to my office. It was cool to the office. I think I will go to vacation two weeks later. Of course,I have to finish two projects. Tonight, I had dinner with my team staff. She looked tired. We had a meal together after long time. While we eating a meal, she cried a lot. I think she needed some comfort. We talked a lot of things. After dinner, She could smile. We worked a little bit more. And I got off work at 10:40PM.

[shawn-hy1232]

Good!

1. 'Before I go to work, I packed yogurt the refrigerator.' -> Rewrite it.

2. 'I usually don't eat a snack. But my doctor told me to eat milk and fruit.' -> 'I usually don't do snacks, but my doctor told me to drink milk and eat fruits.'

3. 'And I have to try to eat at the same time everyday.' -> 'And I have to have meals regularly.'

4. 'Because it is for my health.' -> 'It is a good way to keep my body healthy.'

5. 'it was a little windy.' -> 'it was little windy.'

6. 'at the mart.' -> 'at a mart.'

7. 'It was cool to the office.' -> 'It was cool at the office.'

8. 'go to vacation' -> 'go on a vacation'

9. 'We had a meal together after long time.' -> 'We had a meal together.'

10. 'While we eating a meal, she cried a lot.' -> 'While we were having dinner, she cried. And she cried a lot.'

11. 'We talked a lot of things.' -> 'We talked about lot of things.'

12. 'After dinner, She could smile.' -> 'After the dinner, she felt better.'

13. 'We worked a little bit more.' -> 'We worked little bit more.'