"However, the envisioned impacts of aggregated biologging data on research (expanding modes and scope of inquiry) and conservation (providing robust evidence to guide policy and management) are limited by a lack of standardization, discoverability and accessibility, which has become a growing matter of practical and ethical concern."
This sentence feels a little wordy to me. Maybe switching to active voice and making into 2 sentences would help? A lack of standardization, discoverability, and accessibility has limited the impacts of aggregated biologging data on research and conservation. A lack of openness is a growing matter of practical and ethical concern because... (just a suggestion but I feel this sentence is important and deserves to be really clear)
Also, the final sentence has ", and direct approaches to drive greater research and conservation impacts." I think the comma before the clause should be removed because it's a dependent clause.
https://github.com/FlukeAndFeather/openbiologging/blob/0739a5383b8ec90c04473bb5174413f74da35b72/reports/registeredreport.qmd#L16C881-L16C902
"However, the envisioned impacts of aggregated biologging data on research (expanding modes and scope of inquiry) and conservation (providing robust evidence to guide policy and management) are limited by a lack of standardization, discoverability and accessibility, which has become a growing matter of practical and ethical concern."
This sentence feels a little wordy to me. Maybe switching to active voice and making into 2 sentences would help? A lack of standardization, discoverability, and accessibility has limited the impacts of aggregated biologging data on research and conservation. A lack of openness is a growing matter of practical and ethical concern because... (just a suggestion but I feel this sentence is important and deserves to be really clear)
Also, the final sentence has ", and direct approaches to drive greater research and conservation impacts." I think the comma before the clause should be removed because it's a dependent clause.
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