I had a lot of notes for the first paragraph, but as I edited, it was hard to make it better than it was. I also think we could rethink lines 67-92, but, again, I couldn't make it better (which is a sign that it is perfect already?). It seems just to jump into more advanced things too quick. It doesn't connect that smoothly with the first few sentences.
I had a lot of notes for the first paragraph, but as I edited, it was hard to make it better than it was. I also think we could rethink lines 67-92, but, again, I couldn't make it better (which is a sign that it is perfect already?). It seems just to jump into more advanced things too quick. It doesn't connect that smoothly with the first few sentences.
I also added a final thought in the conclusion.