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Current: The more-seasoned reader will also find a useful reference document but may also wonder about the omission of terms such as persona , account , or authorization. It could be that these terms (and others?) might not fall within a strict scope of identity-management that the authors wished to cover in this document. Instead, those terms may fall under the category of access management , a closely connected but separate body of information security knowledge.
Suggested: The seasoned reader will also find this a useful reference document but may also wonder about the omission of terms such as persona, account, or authorization. It could be that these terms might not fall within a strict scope of identity management that the authors wished to cover in this document. Instead, those terms may fall under the category of access management, a connected but separate body of information security knowledge.
For the whole document, there are some hyphens which could be em dashes. Plus the use of "identity-management" versus "identity management" is a bit jarring. When it is a noun, there is no need for the hyphen.
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Submitted via website: Current: The more-seasoned reader will also find a useful reference document but may also wonder about the omission of terms such as persona , account , or authorization. It could be that these terms (and others?) might not fall within a strict scope of identity-management that the authors wished to cover in this document. Instead, those terms may fall under the category of access management , a closely connected but separate body of information security knowledge.
Suggested: The seasoned reader will also find this a useful reference document but may also wonder about the omission of terms such as persona, account, or authorization. It could be that these terms might not fall within a strict scope of identity management that the authors wished to cover in this document. Instead, those terms may fall under the category of access management, a connected but separate body of information security knowledge.
For the whole document, there are some hyphens which could be em dashes. Plus the use of "identity-management" versus "identity management" is a bit jarring. When it is a noun, there is no need for the hyphen.