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Tom's comments on 2021-07-13 #95

Closed italobusi closed 2 years ago

italobusi commented 3 years ago

See: https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/teas/4n93tq8tVM54XKrvlsvPoqWLjQs/

You have probably seen yourselves that the ToC cannot cope with some of the headings, those for 3.2.3 and Appendix A; perhaps shortening them is simplest solution :-)

Authors>> Ok, to be fixed in the -17 version of the document

You have 'his' in a couple of places which will probably draw an adverse reaction; perhaps 'their' (which is asexual).

Authors>> Ok, to be fixed in the -17 version of the document

Some minor grammatical quirks, of which I go on seeing more each time I read the I-D - not worth a new version of the I-D IMHO.

/This types of scenarios/These types of scenarios/ or else /This type of scenario/

/modeled in the augmented/modelled in the augmenting/ modelled certainly, augmenting I think

/provides a complete and accurate/provides complete and accurate/

/suboptimal path than performing/suboptimal path than by performing/ /then stitch them/then stitching them/ or perhaps /stitching them together/.

Authors>> Ok, to be fixed in the -17 version of the document

See: https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/teas/4n93tq8tVM54XKrvlsvPoqWLjQs/