Originally posted by **edzob** May 14, 2022
1. The last seven are found in two out of three research tools. E.g. literature and confirmed by interviews or interviews and agreed upon by the expert group. An important observation is that the potential success factors safe working environment and adapt to business language do not originate from the literature research. → you can also rewrite to (1) alle three (2) literature and interviews (3) by interview and expert group and make explicit that literature and interviewees is not part of the result..
4. “ These two success factors can make the difference for the Dutch public sector as possible key differentiators.“ -> make explicit that this is your idea. There is no writing in the thesis that opens up this conclusion. Therefor new information and not based on the analysis of the data.
8. “We now know that there is a probability that the Dutch public sector can move towards Antifragility.” -> we do? How? This was not part of the interviews or the dataset. Right? It was relevant and people reflected on possible success factors.
12. “The Enterprise Architecture will support this by using the first four Enterprise Architecture attributes.” -> this does not feel right with me.. Try to rephrase it in the line of the research question.
15. “Then, the Dutch public sector is probably prepared to respond adequately and flexibly to unforeseen circumstances. “ -> see previous feedback. This was not the research question :)
Discussed in https://github.com/JRBliekendaal/master-thesis/discussions/215