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YUN - Grammar issues in leader description #20515

Closed tydane closed 2 years ago

tydane commented 2 years ago

Quick questions HOI4 version: 1.11.12 Kaiserreich version: 0.21.3 List any other mods used: Colored Buttons

Explanation of the issue: There are a few grammar errors in the description for Tang Jiyao. In the third sentence "and Li Liejun, who would" shouldn't have a comma since there is a dependent clause following an independent clause. The first sentence of the second paragraph is redundant due to having two "since"s. One way it could be improved is "Since then, Yunnan's glory days have long faded away". In the second sentence of the second paragraph "after another, with his failure" shouldn't have a comma since it is a dependent clause after an independent clause. The fourth sentence of the second paragraph is unclear, I'm not certain who the "them" in "Tang's own forces have largely deterred them from taking action against a seemingly hostile Republican province" refers to. In the final sentence "over ambitious" should be "overambitious".

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Alpinia commented 2 years ago

The commas are Oxford commas. I've fixed the rest.