Closed HumorousProse closed 1 year ago
SuperGreenBeans
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1 year ago Improved and fixed everything here. Hunan is quite an old tag but is quite a hidden gem so thank you for investing your time into this! Hope you play it next update too!
HumorousProse
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1 year ago Oh @SuperGreenBeans I didn’t play Hunan fully, only enough to take screenshots of the events and focuses, but I do look forward to the changes in the update. Hopefully Hunan gets some comprehensive treatment in the future! :)
Quick questions OS: Windows 10 HOI4 version: 0.1.12.7 Kaiserreich version: 0.23.3
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Explanation of the issue:
Typos:
[x] "chaotic time[s]"
[x] "...the National Protection Alliance
putappointedas its governorTang Shengzhi, the Buddhist General, [as the provincial governor]..."[x] "After the
end of theZhili victory overSouthern China, it[the KMT in the Northern Expedition, Hunan] was..."[x] "The time[s] ahead
is[are] turbulent one[s] - [Tang Shengming], the brother of Tang Shengzhi,Tang Shengming..."[x] "Cheng Qian,
the Nationalist[a supporter of the KMT]supporter[and a commander in its National Revolutionary Army], also looks..."[x] "...significant economic down[t]urn overnight, but [it was] not
anything[sufficiently damaging enough] to destroy..."[x] "The provin[cial government] must now..."
[x] "One of the Sichuan[ese]
Cliquewarlords..."[x] "...Zhao has
teared[torn]..."[x] "...will retaliate
to[against]..."[x] "...Being
teared[torn] up... [p]ro-Tang Shengzhi..."[x] "Are they really that angry about some useless [piece of] paper?"
[x] "...with people punching in the air." This sentence is grammatically correct but is confusing and doesn't have a clear meaning.
[x] "...putting a [temporary] end to the
temporarychaos."[x] "He has ...had an attempt on his life performed on him..." This makes it seem like it was Zhao Hengti who ordered the assassination on himself, which doesn't make a whole lot of sense, so should be rewritten to preclude that interpretation.
[x] "He
came onto[spoke from] a balcony in Changde..."[x] "...in Changde,
and the[while] forces loyal to Zhao..."[x] "...predicted to start shortly,
and[as] the province is plunged..."[x] "Tang Shengzhi and a few divisions have
come near[laid siege to] the city..."[x] "
But[However], there are fears...making[bringing] him one step closer..."[x] "Dongting Lake is a large lake in the [n]orth of Hunan, after which Hunan is named[;]
for (south of the lake)['hú' means lake, referring to Dongting Lake, and 'nán' means south - thus, Hunan means 'south of (Dongting) Lake'.][x] "...contest
the[its] current dominance by Tang..."[x] "...encircling
the[our] soldiers..."[x] "...[s]outhern Hunan"
[x] "...most [of whom], if not all
of whichhave fled..."[x] "...announced his
ambition for the Presidency[candidacy in the provincial election]."Campaign events where wording could be rewritten better, (including some typos):
[x] The people are drawn to Tang's Buddhist rhetoric!
[x] Cheng wins the people to the Nationalist cause!
[x] Zhao's Federalist platform proves victorious!
[x] Tang's Buddhist policies secure popular support!
[x] The city swings decisively towards Cheng!
[x] Note typo: "Who shall ultimate[ly] be the city's..."
[x] Zhao turns the populace against Tang!
[x] Tang hold[s] on! (note typo here)
[x] Cheng's visits fan the flames!
[x] The peasants rally firmly around Zhao!
[x] Tang secures the support of the countryside!
[x] Cheng comes out on top by a wide margin!
[x] "They demand that[,] whatever may come, [missing text?] actually bring grains and cash crops grown by large estates to market[,] which has long been seen as immoral, be given state recognition." (This sentence is overall confusing and hard to follow.)
[x] Zhao's impassioned pleas sway the peasantry to his side!
[x] (this option is fine)
[x] The incident sparks a wave of pro-Nationalist fervour!
[x] Zhao regains the support of the slum's residents!
[x] Tang's populism wins the residents over!
[x] The residents throw their support behind Cheng!