ROM -- text thread

[LoftonHenderson]

Quick questions HOI4 version: 1.9.3 Kaiserreich version: 12.2 List any other mods used: player led peace conferences, state transfer tool, colored buttons, strategic view adjustments Were you using Steam? Yes Were you in multiplayer? No Which expansions do you NOT have? LaR

Explanation of the issue: Some of this will be super minor suggestions of little consequence, others will be substantive grammatical changes to improve flow, clarity, and sentence structure.

National idea "Incomplete Land Reform": consider changing "...never quite stopped" to "never quite ended" or "ceased" add word "...but it was put on hold..." change "...owing to some prodding by the Monarch and his associates" to "...due to pressure by the Monarchy" change "...the Captain never gave up..." to "...the Captain has never given up..."

National focus "Manoeuvres in the Carpathians": consider changing "...one half living on our side, the other under Hungarian rule" to "...half living within our nation, and the other under the oppressive boot of Hungarian rule". I think it better captures the revanchist spirit of KR Romania I'd also suggest explaining what this focus means beyond "...can never hurt to be prepared...". Perhaps something akin to "Large-scale manoeuvres directly on the Hungarian border will prove our commitment to recovering those lost lands in the eyes of the world and inspire the hearts and minds of our Romanian brothers across the mountains" -- it's not great but hopefully you can see where I'm trying to go with it.

Event "Kingdom of Romania, 1936": in paragraph 1 (p1), sentence 1 (s1) change "grand hopes" to "grand ambitions" in p1, s1 consider changing "...a dream that is still unrealized now in 1936" to "...a dream that remains unrealized to this day" in p1, s2 add add a comma after "Despite some initial successes in 1916," in p1, s3 change "...the troops did not break but instead..." to "...the Romanian Army did not break and instead..." in p1, s4 consider changing "...they rebuilt their army" to "...they rebuilt their strength..." in p1, s4 change "...repelled German forces..." to "...repelled the Central Powers..." in p1, s5 change "the fall only came...etc." to "the end only came when the Russian Revolution and collapse of the Eastern Front made Romania's position untenable" This event text needs significant changes after p1, I'm happy to do that with the files in front of me if you want (I'm in game right now though so I can't copy/paste stuff)

Event "Mechanics of the Great Game": capitalize "the King" in p1 s1/s2

National focus "Safeguard Banking Sector": Is this event a bailout of the banking sector? If so I think the text should make that clear -- further maybe a 60-day consumer goods 5% increase could represent the state funds being injected into the banking sector to stabilize it?

Event "King's Mistress": consider changing p1, s2 to "There is, however, an expectation of discretion: scandals are to be avoided and liaisons terminated should such a scandal occur." in p1, s3 capitalize "the King" p1, s3 should read "...appears to have no discretion whatsoever; indeed, he seems to take great pleasure in publicly flaunting his womanizing lifestyle." p2, s2 should read "It is know that she inherited her Catholicism through her mother, who is a Jewish-born convert; her father, also Jewish-born, is an apothecary who converted to Eastern Orthodoxy." in p2, s4 capitalize "the King" in p3, s1 capitalize "the King" in p3, s1 change "...but he has been acting significantly different..." to "...but he has been acting quite different..." in p3, s2 change "...quite solid..." to "...very strong..." -- change "...putting Magda in a very strong position as a central part of Carol's inner circle." to "giving Magda significant, and apparently lasting, influence within Carol's inner circle." p3, s3 should read "...she has increasingly been targeted by opponents..."

Event "Dissent in the Iron Guard": in p1, s1 change "membership" to "following" in p1, s2 put "Despite strict ideological discipline" at the start of the sentence -- cut "As with any large movement" --> p1, s2 should read "Despite strict ideological discipline, however, the Guard is not monolithic and it increasingly faces non-conformism within its wide membership." p1, s3 should read "These non-conformist tendencies, be they towards radicalism or moderatism, have allowed the King (capitalize 'the King' here) to exploit divisions within the movement leading some young, outspoken Legionnaires to criticize the Legion's leadership." p1, s4 should read "That these dissidents will be punished is a certainty, but degree of said punishment is not -- Cordeanu may not wish to advertise this dissidence in the Legion or alienate younger members whose support remains tentative."

Overall, I am seriously impressed with the new Romania -- pretty freakin awesome job guys I'm gonna keep adding grammar changes in the comments below.

[LoftonHenderson]

Event "Mihai Stelescu": p1 s3 add a comma after "however"

[Telcontar101]

I'd like to note that "the King" is never capitalized in correct English.

[Pietrus69]

implemented for the most part, capitalization of king not withstanding, because indeed I do believe it shouldnt be