Just some minor writing issues, sorry for the long list:
[ ] In the introduction: "meet the growing energy demand" or "meet growing energy demands"
[ ] In purpose of document: "an analytical model to allocate the computing power of each data center and minimize the cost with respect to the Intended Readers"
[ ] for "will lose proportional over transmission", did you mean "power will diminish proportionally to the transmission distance"?
[ ] in scope of requirements: "set the constant renewable pricing", could perhaps be "set the renewable pricing as a constant"?
[ ] "constructed for application to other areas in"
[ ] In Characteristics of Intended Reader: "For proofs and for a complete exposition of all background materials" is not a complete sentence... a verb or something is missing...
[ ] I don't understand this "Furthermore, this document will explain as entry as possible aiming to appliable for more readers."... missing sentence structure.
[ ] In fig. 1 System Context: I think you meant "minimization" and not "minization"?
[ ] In user responsibilities: "keep inputsunderwithin constraints"
[ ] In User Characteristics: "The front user should keep [...]", what is a "front user"? maybe just say "user"?
[ ] in Problem Description: "Minimization AnalysisThis model [...]" should perhaps be "The Minimization Analysis model [...]"
[ ] "distances from electricity power station" should likely be "distances from electricitythe power station." (notice the missing period too)...
[ ] In Physical System Description: "Physics system will regarding to real world." - incomplete sentence or bad structure... Not sure what is meant here...
[ ] "[...] power loseloss along [...]"
[ ] "Each data center will be consuming electricity [...]" or "Each data center will consume electricity [...]"
[ ] "With various of distances as input [..]"
I am going to stop here. I think any spellcheck tool should work fine to resolve most of these issues. 😅
KarenKarenWang
commented
1 year ago
Interesting problem! 😀
Just some minor writing issues, sorry for the long list:
underwithin constraints"electricitythe power station." (notice the missing period too)...loseloss along [...]"ofdistances as input [..]"I am going to stop here. I think any spellcheck tool should work fine to resolve most of these issues. 😅
I tried the plugin/tool LTex suggested in class and it worked really well for me: https://marketplace.visualstudio.com/items?itemName=valentjn.vscode-ltex
Otherwise, maybe just Grammarly or even Microscoft Word work fine as well.