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Suggestions and improvements for the language used in-game. #173

Open hanklank opened 8 years ago

hanklank commented 8 years ago

While updating the Swedish translation I noticed some sentences and typos that could be improved in the original English language. These suggestions will tidy up and strengthen the language used in the game.

\ Pingus are referenced to as Pingus with a capital P except for in some places in the .pot, where they are refereed to as pingus. This should also be Pingus. Example: msgid "Set the window resolution for pingus (default: 800x600)"

\ Pingus are referenced to as Pingus except for in a few places where they are called the penguins. They should be called Pingus there to IMHO. Example: The penguins escaped the mad scientist,

And some suggestions for some of the paragraphs:

"Only levels published under the GPL are allowed into the game. The editor " "automatically inserts a reference \n" "to the GPL, if you want to have your level under a different license, you have " "to change that reference.\n"

could be:

"Only levels published under the GPL are allowed into the game. The editor " "automatically inserts a reference \n" "to the GPL. If you want to have your level under a different license, you'll have " "to change that reference.\n"

msgid "No-one got killed, pretty good work."

could be

Pretty good work - no-one died!

"Similar to the Digger action that you already know from previous levels, there " "is also an action that allows the Pingus to dig horizontally, as opposed to the " "vertical dig ability the Digger action provides. This new action is called " "Basher. "

could be

"Similar to the Digger action that you already know from previous levels, there " "is also an action that allows the Pingus to dig horizontally (opposed to the " "vertical dig ability the Digger action provides). This new action is called " "Basher.

self- destructing typo self-destructing

If Pingus fall too far, they will not be able to survive the " "fall, so keep your eyes open! "

could be

Keep your eyes open - if Pingus fall too far, they will not be able to survive the " "fall!

it allows the Pingu to make " "a small jump and so enables him to reach the platform.

could be

it allows the Pingu to make " "a small jump to reach the platform.

Due to the lack of a Digger " "action in this level the Bomber needs to jump in, but how can it reach the " "place to bomb? "

could be

Due to the lack of a Digger " action in this level the Bomber needs to jump in - but how can he reach the " place to bomb? "

If you don't you " "could end up in the hole just before the exit, so think about how to avoid " "that. "

could be

If you don't, you " "could end up in the hole just before the exit - so think about how to avoid " "that. "

"Trapped in an eternal loop one brave pingu has to break out and go on a journey " "in search for the exit, but he mustn't be too happy once he found it, as there " "is still one last challenge he must solve before being allowed to enter it, " "otherwise all his friends might perish."

could be

Trapped in an eternal loop one brave pingu has to break out and go on a journey " "in search for the exit. He shouldn't be too happy once he finds it though, as there " "is still one last challenge he must solve before being allowed to enter. " "If he doesn't, all his friends might perish.

"Three groups are on their way to the exit, one of them trapped right above it, " "but locked into a box. None of them can make it alone, coordinate them wisely " "and everybody should be able to make it safely to the exit.

could be

"Three groups are on their way to the exit, but one of them is trapped right above it, " "locked into a box. None of them can make it on their own. Coordinate them wisely, " "and everybody should be able to make it safely to the exit.

"The path to the exit is straight, flat and simple, but wait a solid door " "blocking the way? How can the pingus open it? Is that a switch there on the " "hill to the right? Might that be the solution to opening the door and freeing " "the pingus? But how can they reach that switch?"

could be

"The path to the exit is straight, flat and simple - but wait, is there a solid door " "blocking the way? How can the pingus open it? Is that a switch there on the " "hill to the right? Might that be the solution to opening the door and freeing " "the pingus? But how can they reach that switch?"

"High up above the green slime the pingus are moving from column to column, " "getting closer to the exit with each step, but wait, there is a second group of " "pingus, they are stuck. The column next to them has collapsed making getting to " "the exit impossible. Can you find a way around the abyss?"

could be

"High up above the green slime the pingus are moving from column to column, " "getting closer to the exit with each step - but wait, there's a second group of " "pingus and they're stuck. The column next to them has collapsed and makes getting to " "the exit impossible. Can you find a way around the abyss?"

"The pingus are released close together, but split up by a solid metal column " "with seemingly no way to join them back up. The journey will be dangerous and " "some height has be crossed with the exit hidden below. With some cleverness it " "should be possible to join those two groups back together."

could be

"The pingus are released close together, but split up by a solid metal column " "with seemingly no way to join them again. With the exit hidden below, the journey" "will be dangerous and some height has to be crossed. With some cleverness it " "should be possible to join the two groups."

"The pingus are at the top of the tower, with no stairway around. The exit is " "deep down, hidden at the foot of the tower. How shall they make it down all " "that height with no floaters sight? A few well placed diggers should be enough " "to get the job done, but wait, no, their direction isn't quite right. You have " "to give them directions or it will be their doom."

could be

"The pingus are at the top of the tower, with no stairway around. The exit is " "deep down, hidden at the foot of the tower. How shall they make it down all " "that height with no floaters in sight? A few well placed diggers should be enough " "to get the job done - but wait, no - their direction isn't quite right. You have " "to give them directions, or it will be their doom."

"After their long and dangerous journey through the desert the Pingus finally " "reach the large pyramid, but there is still a pedestal blocking their way."

could be

"After their long and dangerous journey through the desert the Pingus finally " "reach the large pyramid. However, there is still a pedestal blocking their way."

"After the Pingus have entered the pyramid, they reach a large room with a large " "window. The only problem they have is that the entrance to the room is much too " "high to survive the landing. Can you help them?"

could be

"After the Pingus have entered the pyramid, they reach a large room with a large " "window. The only problem that they have is that the entrance to the room is much too " "high to survive the landing. Can you help them?"

"The Pingus are separated from the exit by large abyss. A simple bridge won't be " "enough to catch them safely, unless of course you find the right place to put " "it. Can you uncover that spot?"

"The excavations are open to reach the pyramid for his redeeming content. Some " "excavations, however, is best done with two competitors. Who comes first?"

could be "The excavations are open to reach the pyramid for the?? redeeming content. Some " "excavations, however, is best done with two competitors. Who comes first?" could be

"The Pingus are separated from the exit by a large abyss. A simple bridge won't be " "enough to safely catch them - unless of course you can find the right place to place " "it. Can you uncover that spot?"

"Hidden deep below the pyramid the pingus come across a small underground room, " "but unfortunately a large tree root blocks their path..."

could be

"Hidden deep below the pyramid the pingus comes across a small underground room, " "- but unfortunately a large tree root blocks their path..."

"The path to the exit is blocked and many small tunnels lead the way, but be " "careful some of those lead to certain death. Or is there something you can do " "about that and create a save passage for all the Pingus and lead them safely to " "the exit?"

could be

"The path to the exit is blocked but many small tunnels lead there - be " "careful as some of them leads to certain death. Or is there something you can do " "about that and create a safe passage to the exit for all the Pingus?"

msgid "Pingus invade the nest. Take care of jaws. What's the matrix above?"

should it be?

"Pingus invades the nest. "Beware of jaws. "What's the matrix above?"

"Spy's pingus have marked the location of jaws in the matrix of the death. Many " "died to gain that information :..( Perhaps this help. Perhaps..."

should it be?

Pingus spies have marked the location of the jaws in the matrix of the death. Many " Pingus died to gain that information :..( Perhaps this might help. Perhaps..."

"Spy's pingus in the matrix of the death"

could be

Pingus spies in the matrix of death

"The defenses of the aliens get stronger. Now you have to jump in the fourth " "dimension to win!"

could be

"The defenses of the aliens gets stronger. Now you have to enter the fourth " "dimension to win!"

"All Pingus need is to jump.... Hint: While pausing (press P key) you still can " "control Pingus."

could be

"All Pingus needs to do is to jump.... Hint: You can still " "control Pingus while pausing (press P key) ."

"It looks you have encountered serious difficulties. But don't panic, Pingus are " "waiting for your orders, they count on you so don't fail! Hint: Miners, diggers " "and bashers are very important here!"

could be

"It looks like you have encountered serious difficulties. But don't panic, Pingus are " "waiting for your orders. They are counting on you, so don't fail! Hint: Miners, diggers " "and bashers are very important here!"

There are at least four ways out. Could you find them?"

could be

There are at least four ways out. Can you find them?

"Here you might have some time to relax. The path isn't complicated and a bit of " "bombing and catching of Pingus should bring you to the end without much " "trouble, but don't relax to much, your resources are limited, so be careful " "when using them."

could be

Here you might have some time to relax. The path isn't complicated, and a bit of " "bombing and catching of Pingus should bring you to the end without much " "trouble. Don't relax too much though, your resources are limited."

"Bridges are kind of rare around here, so don't waste any. That aside, you " "shouldn't have to much trouble here, everything to do here you should have " "learned, but you might have to use all that knowledge at once."

could be

Bridges are kind of rare around here, so don't waste any. That aside, you " shouldn't have too much trouble here - you should be familiar with everything to do here.

you should be able to even solve this.\n"

could be

should be able to solve even this

"Two groups of Pingus separated by a deep abyss, joining them by a bridge seems " "impossible, but wise coordination of the two groups and a brave leap should let " "you make it to the exit."

could be

"Two groups of Pingus are separated by a deep abyss and joining them by a bridge seems " "impossible - but wise coordination of the two groups combined with a brave leap should let " "you make it to the exit.

msgid "Crystaline sparkling full of danger"

should this be?

Crystaline and sparkling full of danger"

"Hidden deep below the pyramid the pingus come across a small underground room, " "but unfortunately a large tree root blocks their path..."

could be

"Hidden deep below the pyramid the pingus comes across a small underground room " "- but unfortunately a large tree root blocks their path..."