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Static files of the PoliTo Rocket Team website
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(not urgent)" Who are we" text #3

Closed fabioski01 closed 2 years ago

fabioski01 commented 2 years ago

The text "The people behind it are engineering students from different courses with great plans for the future." sounds odd to me, especially the part "the people behind it". Perhaps something like "We are a group of around 20 undergraduate and graduate engineering students with great plans for the future"

Fedesky25 commented 2 years ago

Is it better now?

We are the newly established rocketry student team of Politecnico di Torino, entirely dedicated to the design and construction of high-powered sounding rockets, and composed by a group of around 20 undergraduate and graduate engineering students with great plans for the future.

fabioski01 commented 2 years ago

"Composed by" is not used. I would write "...dedicated to the design and construction of high-powered sounding rockets, composed of a group..."

Fedesky25 commented 2 years ago

Fixed