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V² > DIY > Intro > Missing Standard #209

Open VillageHubertChen opened 8 years ago

VillageHubertChen commented 8 years ago

Generic Tasks

georgillies commented 8 years ago

Review

  1. "This white paper compares the new PC standard V² Modular PC to the current.." : perhaps additional space after "standard"
  2. "The reason of being for the new PC standard becomes obvious ..." (leave out "In this comparison")
  3. Table "Symtoms of the missing standards": "Tooling Cost" is a standard term?
  4. "Problem 2": "... files on on www.formfactors.org." Discard an "on".
  5. "Standardized Contribution Workflow", "Agile": "custom developed tools and mashup"??
  6. "V2CAM.flow": "We found that there does not exist a standard on how to" (or "there is no existing standard")
  7. V2Art: "Vector" not "Vexctor"?
  8. Grand conclusion: "influence" instead of "influennce" and "expect" instead of "exspact"
VillageHubertChen commented 8 years ago

Reply to Georg's review

@georgillies

  1. "This white paper compares the new PC standard V² Modular PC to the current.." : perhaps additional space after "standard" → We will remove italic
  2. "The reason of being for the new PC standard becomes obvious ..." (leave out "In this comparison") → done
  3. Table "Symptoms of the missing standards": "Tooling Cost" is a standard term? → It is a term. At least in Asia.
  4. "Problem 2": "... files on on www.formfactors.org." Discard an "on". → done
  5. "Standardized Contribution Workflow", "Agile": "custom developed tools and mashup"?? → A Mashup is a term of gluing together several Software As A Service into a new SAAS.
  6. "V2CAM.flow": "We found that there does not exist a standard on how to" (or "there is no existing standard") → fixed.
  7. V2Art: "Vector" not "Vexctor"? → fixed
  8. Grand conclusion: "influence" instead of "influennce" and "expect" instead of "expact" → fixed
    • [ ] LC: Remove italic of highlights
georgillies commented 8 years ago

The text appears to be professional style: Makes quite clear all the benefits in particular for manufacturers. Well done.

VillageHubertChen commented 8 years ago

thanks. always nice to hear that :-)

VillageHubertChen commented 8 years ago

Request for critical review

@kcaswelch

I finished the white paper → V²: The Missing PC Standard. I received glowing reviews from my editors. They are very excited that this white paper is suitable to get attention from the press to report about V² / V²PC / ViPC. If so this would be great to get brand name out and to get pre-sales going for the V² Shop-Midwest.

Before getting into that I would like you to review this white paper critically and let me know what you think.

This white paper is completely finished. As such please review it rigorously. Do you share in the optimism of my editors?

kcaswelch commented 8 years ago

Sorry Hubert, but I get error 404 when I click on the link to the paper. I'm using my iPhone.

VillageHubertChen commented 8 years ago

@kcaswelch

Hi Karen, I just see your message now, only accidentally.

  1. Please next time address your comment to me. You can do this easily by using the @ sign and then begin typing "villagehubertchen"
  2. I changed the path based on reviewers feedback. This is why your link broke. I fixed it in the issue. It is working now.
  3. Next time when you get a broken link, you can reach the article by navigation through the menu system. Alternatively you can ask Bobby or Tom for help.
  4. Although late, can you still give a review? → https://v-squared.github.io/diy/intro/missing-standard/
  5. Give feedback in comment, addressed to me