[Oath] Ra'tiza's journals

[Yoppish]

I decided to take the task of a collection of short stories told by Ra'tiza and make it a series of Journals he kept as he traveled across Tamriel. For right now all i have is a draft of Vol. 1 which means this has yet to be peer edited and thoroughly checked for typos and grammar mistakes and it put here for input. I will do the same thing for the other volumes (i'm thinking a total of 6 volumes but 4 or 5 could be it) Vol. 1 is just the blacksmith story i used in my application with the dialogue removed notes by Ra'tiza added and slight adjustments to the story. So please be as honest and harsh with criticism as you can be trust me i can take it and it will only help me improve

Thanks

• Oath

  https://docs.google.com/document/d/1bb97TE_3e9Vs78iZfkSR9ltdmWqecr9fCXrXLZHAWkk/edit?usp=sharing

[Arkaash]

If I were you, I'd keep the context of the conversation with the Argonian around the campfire from the previous version - the context makes the fable seem more relevant and powerful. It would make these journals stories of Ra'tiza's teaching, then, rather than just a book of fables.

[Yoppish]

I've done an edit were i added a new note section as an in between style of the journal style i liked and the dialogue style. in future volumes Theilul-Ei's notes will reference Ra'tiza's notes more directly.

[Wheeze201]

So is this finished? Can this be closed?