Copy adjustments for brochure pages

[ragesoss]

Quantitative:

• Move "Students change." from the first paragraph to the second.
• Remove "Inspiring Learning" from the end of the second paragraph.
• Change (red) "Since 2010, students have made amazing contributions to Wikipedia" to "Measuring the difference"
• Remove all the red overline descriptions of the numbers. Following the designs of the print versions, we want to lead with the numbers and explain them after.
• For the "Courses taught..." and "Number of students...", add in copy from the brochure beneath the numbers: "The number of courses taught throughout our program since 2010." and "That's how many students have taken on Wikipedia assignments since 2010."

Qualitative:

• Remove all the red overline descriptions of the numbers (per above).
• "Thoughts from Students" works; we can make that black.

[ragesoss]

Actually, on further reflection, we want to remove both the "Thoughts from Students" and "Thoughts from Instructors" headers. The quotes explicitly identify the people as instructor or student, so it shouldn't be a source of confusion.

[thenickcox]

Hi, @ragesoss. One issue with the photos of the students is that they don't go super well together, even with a higher-res version of Anna:

The coloring is quite different; we could make them both black & white to make them look less visually jarring. Or we could keep them as-is. Thoughts?

[thenickcox]

Lastly, one final copy edit is needed. On the "How do you measure the difference that open knowledge makes?" page, there's a heading that says, "Since 2010, students have made amazing contributions to Wikipedia." You can see it in context here:

Is there final copy for that bit?

[ragesoss]

That red copy should be changed to "Measuring the difference".

On Wed, Jul 15, 2015 at 12:45 PM, Nick Cox notifications@github.com wrote:

Lastly, one final copy edit is needed. On the "How do you measure the difference that open knowledge makes?" page, there's a heading that says, "Since 2010, students have made amazing contributions to Wikipedia." You can see it in context here:

[image: screen shot 2015-07-15 at 12 44 49 pm] https://cloud.githubusercontent.com/assets/702327/8708180/5638ed8c-2aef-11e5-88b6-ac0da1adf58f.png

Is there final copy for that bit?

— Reply to this email directly or view it on GitHub https://github.com/WikiEducationFoundation/WikiEduWebsite2015/issues/19#issuecomment-121724611 .

[thenickcox]

Right you are! Missed that in your edits. Sorry.

[ragesoss]

Thanks Nick.

We agree that this doesn't work with the photos we have. Can you explore doing it without photos at all for these quotes (and then at a later date, we can add new photo/quote pairs when we have good ones).

-Sage

On Wed, Jul 15, 2015 at 12:43 PM, Nick Cox notifications@github.com wrote:

Hi, @ragesoss https://github.com/ragesoss. One issue with the photos of the students is that they don't go super well together, even with a higher-res version of Anna:

[image: screen shot 2015-07-15 at 12 41 50 pm] https://cloud.githubusercontent.com/assets/702327/8708111/f1f743f0-2aee-11e5-82f7-ff3a2b3bd0cd.png

The coloring is quite different; we could make them both black & white to make them look less visually jarring. Or we could keep them as-is. Thoughts?

— Reply to this email directly or view it on GitHub https://github.com/WikiEducationFoundation/WikiEduWebsite2015/issues/19#issuecomment-121724200 .

[ragesoss]

@thenickcox I think this works, for now (until we find some better pictures). One little issue is that only three of the quotes are displayed in the mobile view. The final one just disappears, and isn't available in the swipe segment.