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Review for Ruoxian Wu by Yiming Tang #2

Open Yiming1220 opened 9 months ago

Yiming1220 commented 9 months ago

Since the author doesn't set his project publicly, I cannot issue comment and pull request, so I comment here!!! Link: https://github.com/ScarletWu/Descriptive_Analysis_Assessing_Immunization_Coverage.git

Code Organization and Clarity: The organization of code within each folder is commendably clear, enhancing readability and ease of navigation. However, I recommend a thorough review of the download section. Specifically, the title in this section appears to be incorrect, as it does not accurately reflect the download aspect.

Paper Review – Immunization Coverage and Exemption Rates: The paper presents an investigation into the immunization coverage and exemption rates in Toronto schools. The overall structure of the paper is commendable, with clear segmentation and logical flow.

In the discussion section, the author identifies trends and relationships between school size, vaccination coverage, and exemption rates. I suggest that the paper would benefit from a clarification on whether these observations suggest causal relationships or are simply correlations. This distinction is vital in public health research to prevent any misinterpretation of the data.

Additionally, the discussion could be enriched by briefly exploring potential factors behind these observed trends. It would be insightful to consider if socio-economic, cultural, or policy factors in larger schools might be influencing these trends.

While the paper notes variation in vaccination rates, a more in-depth exploration of the implications of these findings would be beneficial. Understanding how these variations impact public health efforts in Toronto and the potential consequences for community health is crucial.

The paper successfully opens avenues for future research. I recommend that future studies might focus on exploring the reasons behind the consistent exemption rates across schools or the impact of various public health strategies on improving coverage rates.

Overall, the analysis presented in the paper is insightful and addresses a significant public health issue. The suggestions provided herein are intended to enhance the depth and clarity of the findings, thereby enriching the paper's contribution to the field.