Global Paper Draft 1 - Githubissues

Hi @gwenchee . Thanks for putting it together. So far, I have only made comments on the first page. They are sufficiently dense that I'd like you to review the writing checklist and apply it to the whole paper before I continue my review.

My scribbles on the first page are here:

chee-global-paper.pdf

The writing checklist is here:

[ ] Run a spell checker.
[ ] The Oxford comma appears in ("lions, tigers, and bears.")
[ ] Do not use the word "where" unless referring to a location (try "such that" or "in which").
[ ] Articles such as "a" "the" "some" "any" and "each" appear where necessary.
[ ] All subjects match the plurality of their verbs ( no: "Apples is tasty" yes: "Apples are tasty")
[ ] Avoid run-on sentences.
[ ] clunky nouns -> spunky verbs (progression, expression --> progress, express)
[ ] reduce vague words (important, methodologic)
[ ] reduce acronyms / jargon
[ ] get rid of unnecessary prepositional phrases -- author clearing throat (It can be shown that)
[ ] get rid of extraneous adverbs (very, really, quite, basically, generally)
[ ] get rid of there are / there is
[ ] turn negatives to positives (she was not often right -> she was usually wrong)
[ ] get rid of extraneous prepositions (the meeting happened on monday -> the meeting happened monday) (they agreed that it was true -> they agreed it was true)
[ ] get rid of passive voice (is/was/are/were/be/been/am + past tense verb), replace with active voice
[ ] use strong verbs (use sparingly: is, are, was, were, be, been, am)
[ ] avoid turning verbs into nouns ("obtain estimates of" -> "estimates"; "provides a description of" -> "describes")
[ ] don't bury the verb (keep the predicate close to the subject at the beginning of the sentence)
[ ] data is plural (the data are critical)
[ ] compare to (point out similarities between different things) vs. compared with (point out differences between similar things)
[ ] punctuation helps you to vary your sentence structure
[ ] Power to separate in increasing power: comma, colon, dash, parentheses, semicolon, period
[ ] In increasing order of formality: dash, parentheses, all of the others. Don't overdo it with the dash and parentheses
[ ] semicolon: connects two independent clauses. OR used to separate when the items in the list contain internal punctuation.
[ ] use a colon to introduce a list, quote, explanation, conclusion, or amplification
[ ] if there's a list in a sentence, it shouldn't come before the colon
[ ] use a dash to insert something in the middle of the sentence. Don't overuse it.

arfc / 2019-chee-global

Global Paper Draft 1 #8