Line edits/proofreading?

[jessheyman]

What's the easiest way to do this?

[cathydeng]

let's keep all line edits as different comments under this issue, & reference the page that needs to be edited in each comment. thanks!

I'm excited that you're using github now :D

[jessheyman]

Haha, me too! I can see why you use it, it is easier :) Ok, so for punctuation changes, I'm just gonna write what it should be in ALLCAPS.

Based on your answers, you were arrested as a juvenile PERIOD http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/juvrecord

[jessheyman]

Were you PROSECUTED as an adult?

Some juvenile cases can be SENT TO adult court if they are serious PERIOD http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/qb

(Just realized that these are edits that Josh made--I won't duplicate his other ones.)

[jessheyman]

THEY might have called it an 896 dismissal. http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/896

[jessheyman]

DELETE [Note] on http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/misdemeanor2

(Unless there was something you wanted to add? I don't think that one needed clarification?)

Josh wanted to change the text to FINISHED YOUR SENTENCE.

[jessheyman]

DELETE [Note] on http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/felony1

(Again, unless there was something you wanted to add? I don't think that one needed clarification?)

[jessheyman]

Did all the edits that Josh made, in the PDF he sent out early this am, come through properly? I was trying to avoid duplicating work, so wasn't planning on re-doing those on here. Let me know.

[cathydeng]

they didn't render properly on my phone, but I just took a look at it again and the edits make sense - I'll work on the content edits tonight

[jessheyman]

It looks like you haven't gotten to Josh's edits yet--is that right? I don't want to double check til you're done.

[jessheyman]

Missing text: on http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/agearrested, there should be a Note below.

Note: The expungement process is per case - if you have multiple arrests or court cases, you have to do this for each arrest or case separately. There are different rules that apply to different situations.

[cathydeng]

fixed

[jessheyman]

For more information, read about 'Transfer' in the Glossary PERIOD.

Also please put that sentence on a different line, below.

http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/qb

[jessheyman]

But because an SPACE adjudication is not a conviction, these benefits should not be taken away.

http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/consequences, Food Stamps.

[jessheyman]

LCCR's [no A in the acronym] holistic legal representation helps young people achieve their goals in court and in life, advocating for a juvenile justice system that is fair, compassionate, and supportive of positive youth development.

http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/about

[jessheyman]

There should be periods at the end of each paragraph on the Legal Aid page.

Orleans Parish Juvenile Court is located at 421 Loyola Ave, NEW ORLEANS, LA 70112.

http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/legalaid

[jessheyman]

Find out more about adult expungement here PERIOD.

http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/adultrecord

[jessheyman]

Based on your answers, it's unclear if you were arrested as a juvenile or as an adult PERIOD

http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/adultorjuv

[jessheyman]

It looks like you need some more information to figure out if you're eligible for juvenile expungement PERIOD

You should call the Louisiana Center for Children’s Rights at (504) 207-4577 PERIOD.

http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/notsure

[cathydeng]

keeping this issue open while there are still things to do

[jessheyman]

To find a free lawyer, click HERE PERIOD.

http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/noteligible

[cathydeng]

above fixed!

[jessheyman]

If you were arrested in Louisiana when you were 16 or younger, you probably have a juvenile record.

Your juvenile record can have long-lasting negative effects. The good news: Most juvenile records can be erased through a process called juvenile expungement.

http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/questions

[jessheyman]

Titles on top:

Change "Glossary" to "What do these terms mean?"

Change "Legal Aid" to "Find a Lawyer"

I can go back and find all the pages that link to those.

[jessheyman]

Change "Legal Aid" to "Find a Lawyer"

http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/legalaid

[jessheyman]

About Expunge.la This is a web resource created for people with juvenile records in Louisiana.

A juvenile record can be a barrier to employment, education, and other opportunities. Luckily, juvenile records can sometimes be erased through the expungement process. Expunge.la aims to clarify the juvenile expungement process and connect people to legal aid, with the hope of more people getting their records erased!

This project is brought to you by the Louisiana Center for Children's Rights, a non-profit law office working to defend the right of every Louisiana child to fairness, dignity, and opportunity. LCCR's holistic legal representation helps young people achieve their goals in court and in life, and we advocate for a juvenile justice system that is fair, compassionate, and supportive of positive youth development.

http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/about

[jessheyman]

Change "Collateral Consequences" to "How Can a Juvenile Record Hurt Me, and How Can Expungement Help?"

But, having a juvenile record can still have an impact on housing benefits, college applications, and getting a job – among other things. [This is changing the dash type]

http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/consequences

[jessheyman]

DISCLAIMER This website tries to help you understand juvenile expungement. The website is not a substitute for talking to a lawyer. To make sure that there is no misunderstanding, it's a good idea to speak with a lawyer:

• If you don’t know how to answer any of the following questions, or • After you go through all the questions, to double check your eligibility.

IF YOU NEED HELP: For help finding a lawyer, just click FIND A LAWYER on the top right.

Juvenile expungement can involve complicated language. If you are not sure what a word means, just click "What do these terms mean?" on the top right.

http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/disclaimer

[jessheyman]

Not yet 17 [capitalize the N]

http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/agenow

[jessheyman]

For more information, click on "What do these terms mean?" to read about 'Transfer'.

http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/qb

[jessheyman]

Note: If you had probation or spent time at an Office of Juvenile Justice facility, you were found guilty of something. If you spent time in the Youth Study Center or other pre-trial detention center, you were not necessarily found guilty of anything. If you have questions about what this means, please check out "What do these terms mean?" for more information.

http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/qc

[jessheyman]

After you pled or were found guilty, did the judge say that your case would get dismissed if you stayed out of trouble for 6 months? They might have called it an "896."

http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/896

[jessheyman]

Was your case a misdemeanor or a felony?

[in the misdemeanor list]

• Aggravated assault (if it did not involve a gun)

[in the felony list]

• Possession with intent to distribute any drug
• Possession of cocaine or heroin

http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/qd

[jessheyman]

Pages with Legal Aid links not already mentioned above:

Now, let's get in touch with a free lawyer! http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/eligible1 http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/eligible2

[cathydeng]

reluctant to change 'LEGAL AID!' to 'FIND A LAWYER' b/c:

1. the latter is longer and there is limited space on the toolbar. especially since I increased the font, to go with the increased logo size
2. the latter seems more formal and less inviting to click on, & less suggestive that aid is readily available

maybe we could even make it as short/inviting as 'FREE HELP!'

[cathydeng]

also, reluctant to change glossary to 'what do these terms mean' b/c of length. I added a sentence in the disclaimer pointing users to the glossary if they don't know what a specific word means

[cathydeng]

ok, fixed. I also changed the header at http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/legalaid to 'Free Legal Help!' to make it more inviting

[jessheyman]

If you were arrested in Louisiana when you were 16 or younger, you probably have a juvenile record.

[Missing things: change 17 to 16, and put a period at the end.]

http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/questions

[jessheyman]

This website tries to help you understand juvenile expungement. The website is not a substitute for talking to a lawyer.

[Josh split up the old first sentence into 2 sentences.] http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/disclaimer

[jessheyman]

In felony list:

• Possession with intent to distribute of any drug

[An extra "of" ended up in there] http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/qd

[cathydeng]

fixed

[jessheyman]

First, if you were over fourteen when the alleged delinquent act occurred, the basic information about the case — including your name, age, and the offense — can be released to the general public under certain circumstances.

[After the dash, it currently says "may can"]

http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/consequences, How much of my record....

[jessheyman]

If you were over fourteen at the time the offense was alleged to have BEEN committed and are adjudicated for any of the following crimes, then you will have to register as a sex offender:

[Missing the "been"]

http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/consequences, Sex offender

[jessheyman]

• Sexual battery
• Aggravated battery

[Can we make the "b" in battery lower case? Noticed they're the only ones with the second word capitalized.]

http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/qd, Felonies

[jessheyman]

• Tampering with an ELECTRONIC monitor (ankle bracelet)

[Currently says "electionic"]

http://expunge-la.herokuapp.com/qd, Felonies

[cathydeng]

ok, fixed. can we put additional line edits, if any, in a new issue? it'll be better for staying organized b/c this one is getting long

[jessheyman]

Thanks!! Oh--for the Sex Offender thing I didn't want the "been" capitalized, I was just using our old method of using caps to indicate changes. Sorry, I realize that was confusing.

[jessheyman]

Looks great!