Final Article Suggestions

In reference to 7845bd29301aa613a85192bf4a556f7dcc3fc8a3

Overall: Good article, I reall enjoyed it. Most of these changes are gramatical and word choice. If you could find some sort of statistics or something to help your argument, that would help but may not be necessary.

DO NOT USE CONTRACTIONS. Find words like don't and replace them with do not, etc. Capitalize "the Internet" whenever you use it.

First Paragraph:

The first sentence seems to be a run on, maybe try breaking it up to read smoother.
After listing Sony, Samsung, etc, you say "working tours" I think there's a typo in there, and if not, I'm not sure what you mean.
In the same sentence, before "electronic appliances" put "and", also delete "to" before able.
"Some of those advantages are automation and control, you have the ability to control these physical items wirelessly, and they can communicate with each other and complete tasks without human intervention." This sentence is a bit confusing. Either break it up into two sentences after saying "automation and control" or re-word to make it flow (ie "...and control, since you have the ability... wirelessly, they can communicate with each other...")
I'm not quite sure what you are writing about in the last sentence. Definitely read through it again and try to redo it. Also, take a stance since this is a persuasive article. Like, say "Due to these risks, companies need to..."

Second Paragraph:

First sentence: "When creating a new technology, " <-- add the comma
Second sentence: "... and they rather" could be replaced with "... and instead, opt for aesthetics over security"
When you talk about company's concerns, say "primary concerns are the use of the product, its appeal, and its interaction with other devices" instead of listing all the questions.
"when these products are out for sale" could be redone to say "when these products are available for purchase by consumers"
"Anyone with the skills can easy" sounds weird. Consider "Anyone with significant networking knowledge could easily hack" and delete "be able to" before saying "infiltrate" and "into" right after.
"and steal these sensitive information." should instead be "to steal this sensitive information".

Third Paragraph:

You need to define DDoS first since it is not a common term.
Should botnet be capitalized or not? You switch it up a few times.
"They are infected with malware that turns them into bots and the attackers and converts these IOT devices into DDoS attackers" I'm not sure what this means. Try to reword it and simplify it so it's easier to understand.
In the sentence where you give the quote from an article, say "Nick Woolf says that, according to experts, the "DDoS attack that disrupted the internet was largest of its kind in history" ".
"Mirai botnet was a much larger than what most DDoS attacks could previously achieve." Add "The" at the beginning, and get rid of "a" before "much larger"
Next sentence sounds kind of weird. Try "Now the question is, could this DDoS attack have been prevented"
When you answer the question, consider ending the sentence after yes and starting a new sentence.
Finally, delete "also" in the last sentence and change hack to "hacking"

Fourth Paragraph:

"Companies can start re-analyzing their budget to see where they can reduce the cost of some things and place those relocate money into the security implementation of their devices." I'd suggest replacing "re-analyzing" with "can reevaluate" and delete "of some things" and say "and place that relocated money"
"I argue in the long run", add "that" after "argue" and a comma after "run"
"is secure" not "it's secure"

Final Paragraph:

The last sentence is kind of weird. I'd suggest saying something like "Making IOT devices more secure would be beneficial to both companies and their customers" and then say why.

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