-Like timing of Dodo intro now - feel like i just want a line or two more to give us a sense of him b/t i am a young man...' and 'that is kind of what...'
-Maybe have the LF audio a little closer to the previous shot?
-Like the touch of having Pierre there as more of a presence. Like how this is building.
-Feeling like we need just a little more elevation in this opening sequence. Really like how it establishes Dodo, think it's the strongest we've started so far. Maybe we just need to bring in music/sound design elements in the right spots to make this work?
-Maybe we invert some of the dialogue around 'my mom would cook for the 5 of us' so we end with the 'everybody shares w/ each other' lines
-Maybe we introduce church guy's song earlier, and then have him talk kites more during kite part (w/ just short musical opening?)
-HSM - feel like the 'stories of winemaking...' lines could come right after the memories, before he talks factories at all. Can still leave the 'i don't have a lot of knowledge' line where it is.
-want for music/short montage between JM talking trees and Mireille
-'I am one of the people who want to stay here' should come after we cut to foot man mebbe?
-Single day structure? Start with morning?
-Like timing of Dodo intro now - feel like i just want a line or two more to give us a sense of him b/t i am a young man...' and 'that is kind of what...' -Maybe have the LF audio a little closer to the previous shot? -Like the touch of having Pierre there as more of a presence. Like how this is building. -Feeling like we need just a little more elevation in this opening sequence. Really like how it establishes Dodo, think it's the strongest we've started so far. Maybe we just need to bring in music/sound design elements in the right spots to make this work? -Maybe we invert some of the dialogue around 'my mom would cook for the 5 of us' so we end with the 'everybody shares w/ each other' lines -Maybe we introduce church guy's song earlier, and then have him talk kites more during kite part (w/ just short musical opening?) -HSM - feel like the 'stories of winemaking...' lines could come right after the memories, before he talks factories at all. Can still leave the 'i don't have a lot of knowledge' line where it is. -want for music/short montage between JM talking trees and Mireille -'I am one of the people who want to stay here' should come after we cut to foot man mebbe? -Single day structure? Start with morning?