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An analysis of adaptation of urban living in Australian birds
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Closed wcornwell closed 6 years ago

wcornwell commented 6 years ago

Hello from bullet train! Just read through. Abstract and introduction are great! Discussion gets a bit wordy. Is there a way to distill it down a bit and make the same points with fewer words?

Also maybe I missed this, but is there a way to argue that our urbanization index can be used as quantifiable targets for restoration projects? For example is you succeed in getting an urban avoider into your reveg site, you're doing really well.

coreytcallaghan commented 6 years ago

I just a good hack at the discussion. Rejigged a few things, and cut a reasonable bit of text. Also added a bit on your second point - which I love!

Further potential places to cut text: Sentence 3 from paragraph 2 could be cut?

Last sentence of paragraph 4?