Besides the grammar/punctuation fixes, some of these changes are a bit subjective, of course; but I really liked the imagery you evoked in the opening paragraph and couldn't resist making it a little more "poetic". Let me know if these changes align with your artistic vision :)
Aliqyan-21
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2 weeks ago
Besides the grammar/punctuation fixes, some of these changes are a bit subjective, of course; but I really liked the imagery you evoked in the opening paragraph and couldn't resist making it a little more "poetic". Let me know if these changes align with your artistic vision :)