DanielleThierryUSDSVA commented 2 years ago

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As a Veteran who served in the Gulf War or post-9/11 eras, I need to understand the new presumptive conditions added by the PACT Act and how they affect my eligibility for disability benefits.

What's needed

[x] Update content to reflect PACT Act changes (Danielle)
[x] Copy edit content (Content team)
[ ] Share content with VHA, VBA, and OPIA partners for feedback (Danielle)
[ ] Implement any feedback and hold for publishing until we get the go-ahead after the law passes (Content team)

DanielleThierryUSDSVA commented 2 years ago

@RLHecht Here are the 3 pages for this part of the work:

http://preview-prod.vfs.va.gov/preview?nodeId=884

http://preview-prod.vfs.va.gov/preview?nodeId=889

http://preview-prod.vfs.va.gov/preview?nodeId=885

A few notes:

On the specific environmental hazards page, we've referred to "particular matter" in the past. The PACT Act and related communications that I'm seeing focus more on "burn pits and other toxic exposures" and sometimes "airborne hazards" instead. I'm going to call this out as a question for the working group and SMEs.
Please copy edit full pages, as I also made some updates for plain language and clarity.

RLHecht commented 2 years ago

@katherine-fung Here are the pages. Let me know when you're done and I'll take a read through them as well.

katherine-fung commented 2 years ago

Hi @DanielleThierryUSDSVA,

Randi and I are going over the pages. We ran into a few questions:

On node 884, I wanted to shorten this link text [Learn about service in the Southwest Asia theater of military operations and Gulf War Illness] to "Learn about service in Southwest Asia and Gulf War Illness." I noticed node 885 has the shortened link text - just wanted to confirm that the shortened link text is ok?
This H2 is a little over 70 characters, but I think it makes sense to keep it as is. Can you confirm? "What are the presumptive conditions for service in Afghanistan and certain other areas?"
Is there a reason to say "within 10 years of your separation from active military service" instead of "within 10 years of your last day on active duty"? The latter might be easier from people to compute, but I don't want to conflate the two if they are different.

DanielleThierryUSDSVA commented 2 years ago

Hi @katherine-fung!

On node 884, I wanted to shorten this link text [Learn about service in the Southwest Asia theater of military operations and Gulf War Illness] to "Learn about service in Southwest Asia and Gulf War Illness." I noticed node 885 has the shortened link text - just wanted to confirm that the shortened link text is ok?
- Yes. Thank you for confirming!
This H2 is a little over 70 characters, but I think it makes sense to keep it as is. Can you confirm? "What are the presumptive conditions for service in Afghanistan and certain other areas?"
- Agree! I tried a bunch of ways to get it <70. If you see an opportunity to do so that's not awkward, go for it! But I think we're okay with it as is.
Is there a reason to say "within 10 years of your separation from active military service" instead of "within 10 years of your last day on active duty"? The latter might be easier from people to compute, but I don't want to conflate the two if they are different.
- This is a really great question. I would want to double check this before changing because I do think "separation" has an officiality that I'm not sure "last day" quite captures. And I think that a "separation date" is a well-known term in this particular community. So in that way, I think it's plain language.

RLHecht commented 2 years ago

@DanielleThierryUSDSVA Katherine and I finished reviewing these and they're ready for you!

DanielleThierryUSDSVA commented 2 years ago

Hi @RLHecht @megzehn. I'm going to start adding pages here for copy editing.

First one (one of the ones that the team reviewed before but has more changes): http://preview-prod.vfs.va.gov/preview?nodeId=884

DanielleThierryUSDSVA commented 2 years ago

@RLHecht @megzehn Next page: http://preview-prod.vfs.va.gov/preview?nodeId=885

DanielleThierryUSDSVA commented 2 years ago

Okay! @RLHecht @megzehn these pages are ready for a copy edit:

Feel free to reach out with questions as you edit!

megzehn commented 2 years ago

Hi! End of day status update: the first one is copyedited: http://preview-prod.vfs.va.gov/preview?nodeId=884

I will review the other 2 asap. Are we ok with the passive voice phrase "got diagnosed" on these? I left it for now, but let me know if it would be better to swap it.

I'm also leaving these in draft mode for now per the ticket instructions. Thanks!

DanielleThierryUSDSVA commented 2 years ago

Good morning, @megzehn!

Another one for you this morning: http://preview-prod.vfs.va.gov/preview?nodeId=873

And more to come today!

Note just for the ticket: "got diagnosed" question resolved via slack.

Thanks!

DanielleThierryUSDSVA commented 2 years ago

Here are 2 where we're just going to add an alert for "Day 0" (when the law passes). So just need a check that all looks well with the alert on these pages:

http://preview-prod.vfs.va.gov/preview?nodeId=871 http://preview-prod.vfs.va.gov/preview?nodeId=886

For this page, I've removed the existing alert about adding bladder cancer and 2 other conditions and moved that to an accordion ("What if VA denied my claim for bladder cancer...") and then added the new PACT Act alert:

http://preview-prod.vfs.va.gov/preview?nodeId=874

These are the changes we'll make to this page on "Day 0." We'll make more changes moving forward.

And just to reiterate: All of these pages must stay as drafts until the law passes and we get the go-ahead to publish. It's critical that we don't publish early. Thanks!

megzehn commented 2 years ago

Thanks, @DanielleThierryUSDSVA!

Updates:

These 3 are copyedited and in draft form: http://preview-prod.vfs.va.gov/preview?nodeId=884 http://preview-prod.vfs.va.gov/preview?nodeId=885 http://preview-prod.vfs.va.gov/preview?nodeId=889

I also reviewed the alert on the pages you listed. I changed the placeholder date from June XX to July XX, since it hasn't passed yet, right?

And I reviewed the new accordion on the Agent Orange exposure article.

I'll turn to this one next! http://preview-prod.vfs.va.gov/preview?nodeId=873

DanielleThierryUSDSVA commented 2 years ago

Ah, great call on "July" - yes!

Thanks so much for the status update!

megzehn commented 2 years ago

Hi @DanielleThierryUSDSVA! I finally looked at the Exposure to hazardous chemicals post, and these are my questions:

There were a few inconsistencies re: “at risk of certain illnesses” and “at risk for certain illnesses.” I changed them to “at risk of,” since that’s what I’m seeing as the most common and most searched for, but I went back and forth and didn’t see any specific guidance in AP.

Examples in the post: "If you served in Afghanistan, you may be at risk of certain illnesses or other conditions linked to this region.” “If you served at Camp Lejeune or MCAS New River between August 1953 and December 1987, you may be at risk for certain illnesses believed to be caused by contaminants found in the drinking water during that time.”

Let me know if there’s a different preference or a distinction I’m missing.

The phrase “certain related jobs” feels confusing in this sentence: “If you served in the Republic of Vietnam or in or near the Korean Demilitarized Zone (DMZ) during the Vietnam Era—or in certain related jobs—you may have had contact with Agent Orange, an herbicide used to clear plants and trees during the war.”

Does this mean the same thing?

“If you served in the military—or in certain related jobs—in the Republic of Vietnam or in or near the Korean Demilitarized Zone (DMZ) during the Vietnam Era, you may have had contact with Agent Orange, an herbicide used to clear plants and trees during the war.”

RLHecht commented 2 years ago

@megzehn Danielle went over these on the call we just had.

For 1, yes to changing these all to "at risk of." Good catch!

For 2, we'll leave this content as is. The edit changes the meaning, making it incorrect. We'll leave as is but can revisit at a later date maybe taking out the last part about the herbicide so it makes it a shorter sentence.

megzehn commented 2 years ago

Thanks for the notes, @RLHecht!

DanielleThierryUSDSVA commented 2 years ago

Hi, @RLHecht @laurwill @megzehn. Coming back to this part of the work now that we've launched the main page! I'm going to list pages in this ticket as I have them ready. If we can please make this the top priority for the morning on 8/4, that would be much appreciated. Thank you!!

I'm listing these in priority order:

Exposures to burn pits and other specific hazardous materials - This is ready for an errors and omissions review. Please review against the language on the main page.

Exposure to hazardous chemicals and materials: Ready for copy edit. I added burn pit info in the relevant description and alphabetized list. We had also changed the links from the headers to "Learn more" links a while back for greater accessibility but never published those updates, so we should check those too.

megzehn commented 2 years ago

Hi @DanielleThierryUSDSVA --

I copyedited these 2 and went through the pre-pub checklist. I did not publish, but they should be ready to go!

DanielleThierryUSDSVA commented 2 years ago

Awesome!! Thank you so much, @megzehn! I will add more as they're ready for you.

DanielleThierryUSDSVA commented 2 years ago

Update for team tracking and alignment:

Supplemental claims: New PACT Act alert cleared with VBA and OPIA. Megan is publishing now.
Exposures to burn pits and other specific hazardous materials: Danielle sent to VBA OPO, 8/4/22, 12:30 p.m. and copied Randi. Once we have their okay, next step will be to send to OPIA for their okay and assessment on whether it needs to go to OGC as well.

DanielleThierryUSDSVA commented 2 years ago

@megzehn @laurwill @RLHecht I'm going to start posting more pages. If you can please prioritize so we can move these along asap, I would appreciate it. Thank you!

http://preview-prod.vfs.va.gov/preview?nodeId=874 - ready!

DanielleThierryUSDSVA commented 2 years ago

Good morning, @megzehn @laurwill @RLHecht. A bit of a change of plans on the Agent Orange page. As I was preparing to send this to SMEs, I was thinking about the fact that this is a very long page and a new group of SMEs and I'm worried that a review of integrated content changes may take several days. We need to get the basics of the information up now. So, I put our latest version into a word doc and sent that to our SMEs for review. But, I also told them that for today, we are going to simply put up an alert with previously approved content so that we can have the basics up there for folks who come to this page.

This means I had to revert the page to an earlier version. But all of your/our work is captured in the Word doc so it's not lost! We'll flow it in once we have the approval.

For this morning: Could you please review the latest preview just to look at:

The new PACT Act alert
The new accordion ("What if VA denied my claim for bladder cancer...") that I added to move the content that's in an alert on the existing site so that we can focus the alert on the PACT Act. Please look at this against the alert on the live site to make sure there are no meaning changes.

Thank you!

RLHecht commented 2 years ago

@megzehn @laurwill Here is the burn pit page back from SME with changes we need to implement. Laura, can you input them and Megan you copyedit? Note that we aren't removing the post-9/11 reference as they had originally suggested.

https://app.zenhub.com/files/133843125/d9a40d8b-d9f9-4941-8bfa-2911f2e6e92b/download

megzehn commented 2 years ago

Hi @DanielleThierryUSDSVA - Confirming that the changes in the Agent Orange post look good and have been published. And the burn pit page has been updated and copyedited. It's still in drafts.

DanielleThierryUSDSVA commented 2 years ago

Thank you, @megzehn! I'm awaiting the final go-ahead on burn pits. As soon as I get it, I'll let you know!

DanielleThierryUSDSVA commented 2 years ago

Hi @megzehn @RLHecht @laurwill. Could you please review the new alert and related link on this page? Thank you! http://preview-prod.vfs.va.gov/preview?nodeId=855

megzehn commented 2 years ago

Hi @DanielleThierryUSDSVA! Confirming that we reviewed the alert and related link on this page, and they look good: http://preview-prod.vfs.va.gov/preview?nodeId=855

We're leaving in drafts for now. Thank you!

megzehn commented 2 years ago

Update: nodeId=855 is now live!

DanielleThierryUSDSVA commented 2 years ago

Hi @megzehn! Could you review the new alert on the radiation page? http://preview-prod.vfs.va.gov/preview?nodeId=886. This is the first step in updating this page. Thank you!

megzehn commented 2 years ago

Hi @DanielleThierryUSDSVA - we reviewed and copyedited the alert on nodeId=886. I left it as a draft, but let me know if you want me to change the status.

Thanks!

DanielleThierryUSDSVA commented 2 years ago

Thank you, @megzehn! Go ahead and publish. Thanks!

Here's another for review: http://preview-prod.vfs.va.gov/preview?nodeId=48211. Note that this is a new page I'm recommending to combine 2 previously separate pages. I'll also be sending along updates of those 2 previously separate pages for copy editing because they'll be our interim editing approach. Thanks!

DanielleThierryUSDSVA commented 2 years ago

Hi @megzehn. Just checking in on this latest page. Thanks!

RLHecht commented 2 years ago

@DanielleThierryUSDSVA Megan and I both read through this and it's ready for you!

DanielleThierryUSDSVA commented 2 years ago

Yay! Thank you both so much!

DanielleThierryUSDSVA commented 2 years ago

Status update: http://preview-prod.vfs.va.gov/preview?nodeId=48211 is now with SMEs.

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