Staging Review finding: Outreach events intro paragraph copy feels incomplete

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Product Information

Team: CMS Team Product: Next Build and Next Build's Events and Event Listing Templates Feature: Events and Event Listing Templates

Findings details

VA.gov Experience Standard - issue: User encounters content that does not meet best practices. VA.gov Experience Standard - category: Comprehension Launch-blocking: No Design System review: No Collab Cycle Reviewer: @kkitagawa-bosch (content)

Description

The intro paragraph right now feels incomplete; I'm including some suggestions for improvements.

Link, screenshot or steps to recreate

to be added

Recommended action

I think the biggest issue right now is that the text does not really explain what you do on this page. I would remove the second sentence entirely (Join an event for conversation and information.) and add 1-2 sentences explaining what this page is and encouraging next steps for the user

References

Accessibility Defect Severity: N/A
WCAG Success Criteria: N/A
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Design System Component: N/A
Design System Pattern or Template: N/A
Design System Foundation: N/A
Content Style Guide: Content principles
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