dylannevans
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2 years ago Added some content to and tweaked the medium and short versions. Retitled and rearranged the Long version sections. Major changes: emphasized recognizing the broader cascading/reflective nature of sin, mostly in the second section, which I rescoped to "external factors" (notably God's decisions/approach, plus the current state of the world). Does "My life" connote that? I'm trying to tie the headings in Long together, and it seemed a reasonable compromise.
In general: do the changes improve it? Is it too wordy and/or less clear?
There's certainly nothing that I disagree with here! Here are some things I would change or emphasis differently if it were me. Probably mostly because of what I've found most meaningful and helpful as a result of God's redemptive work in my own life. A lot of these are simply different wordings for the same concepts.