Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-httpbis-p5-range-24

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Document: draft-ietf-httpbis-p5-range-24 Reviewer: Kathleen Moriarty Review Date: November 18, 2013 IETF LC End Date: End of November IESG Telechat date: (if known)

Summary: The draft is ready with nits to resolve. The run-on sentences need to be corrected to make the draft easier to read. I called out a few examples, however, there are many more in the draft. I reviewed this a couple of weeks ago, before -25 was released and am working my way through all of the documents.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:

Please go through the draft in detail and break up run-on sentences into multiple sentences where possible.

Section 3.2: At end of second to last paragraph, remove parenthesis around full sentence.

Section 4.2: Please break first sentence into multiple. Section 4.3 - 4th paragraph really needs to be broken into multiple sentences.

Reported by julian.reschke@gmx.de, migrated from https://trac.ietf.org/trac/httpbis/ticket/521

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• julian.reschke@gmx.de changed milestone from unassigned to 26
• julian.reschke@gmx.de changed severity from In IETF LC to In IESG Evaluation

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@mnot changed type from design to editorial

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• julian.reschke@gmx.de commented:

Is is my opinion that the spec is ok the way it is.

• julian.reschke@gmx.de changed resolution to wontfix
• julian.reschke@gmx.de changed status from new to closed

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fielding@gbiv.com commented:

From 2560:

(editorial) remove parentheses in 3.2 and make the point clearer; see #521