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I-D for YANG module ietf-layer0-types-ext #1

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dieterbeller commented 4 years ago

This is the very early initial I-D for ietf-layer0-types-ext in xml format.

The I-D-preparation branch is used until draft-xxx-ccamp-layer0-types-ext-00 will be submitted.

dieterbeller commented 3 years ago

Hi Italo,

thanks for your comments! I just fixed 2 idnits and submitted the 00-version.

We can of course make the proposed editorial changes before we submit revision -01.

Thanks, Dieter

On 20.02.2021 00:15, italobusi wrote:

@italobusi approved this pull request.

I think the draft is ready for submission

I have just few editorial comments that could be addressed either before or after the -00 draft submission

In draft-esdih-ccamp-layer0-types-ext-00.txt https://github.com/ietf-ccamp-wg/ietf-ccamp-layer0-types-ext/pull/1#discussion_r579521205:

  • approved) H. Zheng

+Intended status: Standards Track I. Busi

+Expires: 26 August 2021 Huawei

  • E. Le Rouzic

  • Orange

  • 22 February 2021

  • A YANG Data Model for Layer 0 Types - Revision 2

  • draft-esdih-ccamp-layer0-types-ext-00

+Abstract

+

  • This document defines a collection of common data types and groupings

  • in the YANG data modeling language, which are used in several YANG

  • modules for wavelength Division multiplexing (WDM) transport

⬇️ Suggested change

  • modules for wavelength Division multiplexing (WDM) transport

  • modules for Wavelength Division multiplexing (WDM) transport

In draft-esdih-ccamp-layer0-types-ext-00.txt https://github.com/ietf-ccamp-wg/ietf-ccamp-layer0-types-ext/pull/1#discussion_r579522255:

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+Beller, et al. Expires 26 August 2021 [Page 2]

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+Internet-Draft Layer 0 Types - Revision 2 February 2021

+

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+1.2. Terminology

+

+2. Extensions for the Layer 0 Types Module

+

  • This document defines YANG module extensions for common Layer 0

  • types. named ietf-layer0-types-ext. This module can be used for

⬇️ Suggested change

  • types. named ietf-layer0-types-ext. This module can be used for

  • types, named ietf-layer0-types-ext. This module can be used for

In draft-esdih-ccamp-layer0-types-ext-00.txt https://github.com/ietf-ccamp-wg/ietf-ccamp-layer0-types-ext/pull/1#discussion_r579522672:

+

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+Beller, et al. Expires 26 August 2021 [Page 2]

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+Internet-Draft Layer 0 Types - Revision 2 February 2021

+

+

+1.2. Terminology

+

+2. Extensions for the Layer 0 Types Module

+

  • This document defines YANG module extensions for common Layer 0

  • types. named ietf-layer0-types-ext. This module can be used for

  • both WSON and Flexi-grid DWDM networks but in particular is adding

  • common types used in the context of optical impairment aware topology

  • model in WSON and SSONs. The ietf-layer0-types-ext module contains

⬇️ Suggested change

  • model in WSON and SSONs. The ietf-layer0-types-ext module contains

  • model in WSON and SSONs.

  • The ietf-layer0-types-ext module contains

In draft-esdih-ccamp-layer0-types-ext-00.txt https://github.com/ietf-ccamp-wg/ietf-ccamp-layer0-types-ext/pull/1#discussion_r579523807:

  • [I-D.ietf-ccamp-optical-impairment-topology-yang]

  • Lee, Y., Auge, L., Lopez, V., Galimberti, G., and D.

  • Beller, "A Yang Data Model for Optical Impairment-aware

  • Topology", Work in Progress, Internet-Draft, draft-ietf-

  • ccamp-optical-impairment-topology-yang-05, 2 November

  • 2020, <https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-

  • optical-impairment-topology-yang-05>.

Since the optical-impairment topology model will use this mode, I think this reference should be informative

In draft-esdih-ccamp-layer0-types-ext-00.txt https://github.com/ietf-ccamp-wg/ietf-ccamp-layer0-types-ext/pull/1#discussion_r579526533:

  • networks. The YANG module ietf-layer0-types-ext updates ietf-

  • layer0-types [I-D.ietf-ccamp-layer0-types], which has been reduced in

  • scope prior to publication to only cover spectrum management related

  • aspects required for ietf-wson-topology [I-D.ietf-ccamp-wson-yang].

I do not think we need to reference the history and the WSON topology model here.

Moreover, idnits complains with references in the abstract.

⬇️ Suggested change

  • networks. The YANG module ietf-layer0-types-ext updates ietf-

  • layer0-types [I-D.ietf-ccamp-layer0-types], which has been reduced in

  • scope prior to publication to only cover spectrum management related

  • aspects required for ietf-wson-topology [I-D.ietf-ccamp-wson-yang].

  • networks.

  • The YANG module ietf-layer0-types-ext extends the module

  • ietf-layer0-types defined in RFCXXX with additional data types

  • and groupings.

  • [RFC EDITOR NOTE: Please replace RFC XXXX with the RFC number of

  • draft-ietf-ccamp-layer0-types once it has been published.

In draft-esdih-ccamp-layer0-types-ext-00.txt https://github.com/ietf-ccamp-wg/ietf-ccamp-layer0-types-ext/pull/1#discussion_r579526984:

  • [I-D.ietf-ccamp-dwdm-if-param-yang]

  • Galimberti, G., Kunze, R., Burk, A., Hiremagalur, D., and

  • G. Grammel, "A YANG model to manage the optical interface

  • parameters for an external transponder in a WDM network",

  • Work in Progress, Internet-Draft, draft-ietf-ccamp-dwdm-

+Beller, et al. Expires 26 August 2021 [Page 22]

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+Internet-Draft Layer 0 Types - Revision 2 February 2021

+

+

Since the dwdm-if model will use this mode, I think this reference should be informative

In draft-esdih-ccamp-layer0-types-ext-00.txt https://github.com/ietf-ccamp-wg/ietf-ccamp-layer0-types-ext/pull/1#discussion_r579527148:

  • [I-D.ietf-ccamp-wson-yang]

I think we can remove this reference (see comment to the abstract)

In draft-esdih-ccamp-layer0-types-ext-00.txt https://github.com/ietf-ccamp-wg/ietf-ccamp-layer0-types-ext/pull/1#discussion_r579527488:

+1.1. Requirements Language

+

  • The key words "MUST", "MUST NOT", "REQUIRED", "SHALL", "SHALL NOT",

  • "SHOULD", "SHOULD NOT", "RECOMMENDED", "MAY", and "OPTIONAL" in this

  • document are to be interpreted as described in RFC 2119 [RFC2119].

This draft is not using RFC2119 requirements language: this section can be removed

In draft-esdih-ccamp-layer0-types-ext-00.txt https://github.com/ietf-ccamp-wg/ietf-ccamp-layer0-types-ext/pull/1#discussion_r579527745:

  • [RFC2119] Bradner, S., "Key words for use in RFCs to Indicate

I think we can remove this reference (see comment above on section 1.1)

In draft-esdih-ccamp-layer0-types-ext-00.txt https://github.com/ietf-ccamp-wg/ietf-ccamp-layer0-types-ext/pull/1#discussion_r579527997:

  • [RFC8795] Liu, X., Bryskin, I., Beeram, V., Saad, T., Shah, H., and

I think we can remove this reference: RFC8795 is not mentioned in the draft text

In draft-esdih-ccamp-layer0-types-ext-00.txt https://github.com/ietf-ccamp-wg/ietf-ccamp-layer0-types-ext/pull/1#discussion_r579532156:

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+CCAMP D. Beller, Ed.

+Internet-Draft S. Belotti, Ed.

+Updates: draft-ietf-ccamp-layer0-types (if Nokia

  • approved) H. Zheng

+Intended status: Standards Track I. Busi

+Expires: 26 August 2021 Huawei

  • E. Le Rouzic

  • Orange

  • 22 February 2021

  • A YANG Data Model for Layer 0 Types - Revision 2

⬇️ Suggested change

  • A YANG Data Model for Layer 0 Types - Revision 2

  • A YANG Data Model for Layer 0 Types - Extension

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