Review comments

[italobusi]

I have reviewed the latest draft and I am fine with the proposed text. I just have few minor editorial comments:

1. • [x] https://github.com/aguoietf/ietf-ccamp-yang-otn-slicing/blob/e9998afc9f09680b9dc542c837867eaf2ef6d816/draft-zheng-ccamp-yang-otn-slicing.txt#L243 It is proposed to add "also" to clarify that an OTN subslice can also terminated at an access link:

     
     <...> and an OTN subslice may terminate
     also at an inter-domain OTN link

2. • [ ] https://github.com/aguoietf/ietf-ccamp-yang-otn-slicing/blob/e9998afc9f09680b9dc542c837867eaf2ef6d816/draft-zheng-ccamp-yang-otn-slicing.txt#L264-L265 TE topology and TE tunnel are models not interfaces.
3. • [ ] https://github.com/aguoietf/ietf-ccamp-yang-otn-slicing/blob/e9998afc9f09680b9dc542c837867eaf2ef6d816/draft-zheng-ccamp-yang-otn-slicing.txt#L356-L363 A bullet or numbered list would be easier to read
4. • [x] When describing multi-domain slices, the slices on each domain are sometimes called slices and sometimes called sub-slice. It would be better to have a common term and use it consistently within the document. Since both types of slices are slices, we could use terms like end-to-end slice and segment slice.

[aguoietf]

"OTN segment slice"

[aguoietf]

Incorporated into in -02.