2nd WG LC Shepherd's Report: G3 items - Main Text English Editorial items

Type G3: Editorial only in Main Text

G3-01: section 2.1

Old text:/ End to End Tunnel: A tunnel spanning several adjacent tunnel domains created by "stitching" them together using MPLS labels (or an equivalent identifier based on the forwarding architecture). /

What to change: - remove ()

New text:/ End to End Tunnel: A tunnel spanning several adjacent tunnel domains created by "stitching" them together using MPLS labels or an equivalent identifier based on the forwarding architecture./

G3-02, section 4.2- fix reference to section 9.1.2.1 of RFC4271

Old text:/ An implementation may realize the TRDB as a "Routing Table" referred in Section 9.1.2.1 of RFC4271 (https://www.rfc-editor.org/rfc/ rfc4271#section-9.1.2.1)/

New text:/ An implementation may realize the TRDB as a "Routing Table" referred in Section 9.1.2.1 of RFC4271./

G3-03: Section 4.3, paragraph 4, extra space before period.

Old text:/ A BGP speaker that implements Route Target Constrain [RFC4684] MUST also apply the RTC procedures to the Transport Class Route Target Extended communities carried on BGP CT routes (AFI/SAFI: 1/76 or 2/76) ./

New text:/ A BGP speaker that implements Route Target Constrain [RFC4684] MUST also apply the RTC procedures to the Transport Class Route Target Extended communities carried on BGP CT routes (AFI/SAFI: 1/76 or 2/76)./

G3-04, section 7.2, paragraph 3 - run-on sentence.

Old text:/ The egress node of the tunnel, i.e. the tunnel endpoint (EP), originates the BGP CT route with RD:EP in the NLRI, Transport Class RT and PNH as EP, which will be resolved over the tunnel route in TRDB at the ingress node./

New text:/ The egress node of the tunnel, i.e. the tunnel endpoint (EP), originates the BGP CT route with RD:EP in the NLRI, Transport Class RT and PNH as EP. This CT route will be resolved over the tunnel route in TRDB at the ingress node./

G3-05 Section 7.4, paragraph 3, last sentence needs article before "impact"

Old text:/ If a different label allocation mode is used, impact on end to end convergence should be considered./

New Text:/If a different label allocation mode is used, the impact on end to end convergence should be considered./

G3-06: Section 7.5, paragraph 2, sentence 1

Old text:/ If the inter-AS links need to honor Transport Class, then the BN MUST follow procedures of an Ingress node described previously and perform the next hop resolution process./

Clarity on reference by giving a section (? section 7.3).

G3-07: section 7.8, paragraph 1, missing an article

Old text:/Upon receipt of a BGP service route (for example, AFI/SAFI: 1/1, 2/1) with a PNH as EP that is not directly connected (for example, an IBGP-route), Mapping Community (for example, Color Extended Community) on the route is used to decide to which resolution scheme this route is to be mapped./

Change: Old text:/Mapping Community/ New text:/a Mapping Community/

G3-08: Section 7.8 paragraph 4, Incorrect use of () outside of the sentence.

Old text:/ If the resolution process does not find a Tunnel Route for EP in any of the Transport Route Databases, the service route MUST be considered unresolvable. (See RFC 4271, Section 9.1.2.1)./ New text:/ If the resolution process does not find a Tunnel Route for EP in any of the Transport Route Databases, the service route MUST be considered unresolvable (See RFC 4271, Section 9.1.2.1)./

G3-09: Section 8.4.1, paragraph 2, space needed

Old sentence:/ Thus, PE25 encapsulates the IP packet in an MPLS packet with label V-L1(innermost), B-L5, and top label as PE25_to_ABR23_gold tunnel. /

change: old:/V-L1(innermost)/ to /V-L1 (innermost)/

G3-10: Section 9.2, paragraph 3

In Paragraph 3 Old sentence:/ The RT carrying : MAY be an IP-address specific regular RT (BGP attribute code 16), IPv6-address specific RT (BGP attribute code 25). / New sentence:/ The RT carrying : MAY be an IP-address specific regular RT (BGP attribute code 16), or IPv6-address specific RT (BGP attribute code 25). /

G3-11: Section 9.3, paragraph 1, sentence 2 - missing period.

Old text:/This is possible using mechanism

  described in Appendix D/

New text:/This is possible using mechanism

  described in Appendix D./

G3-12: Section 11.2.3.1, paragraph 1 + 2 need "101 and 102".

Old text:/ In this approach, duplicate tunnels that satisfy Gold SLA are configured in domains AS1 and AS3, but they are given fine grained colors 101, 102./

New text:/ In this approach, duplicate tunnels that satisfy Gold SLA are configured in domains AS1 and AS3, but they are given fine grained colors 101 and 102./

Old text:/ These tunnels will be installed in TRDBs corresponding to transport classes of color 101, 102./ New text:/ These tunnels will be installed in TRDBs corresponding to transport classes of color 101 and 102./

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