Generally, I feel like this demo ending should be a happy ending.
The page we see when the demo's complete is good, in that it attempts to reiterate what was just seen and to answer some questions a user may have, but it could use a bit more design and organization.
This is a design / copywriting issue. I think we could choose the 4 or 5 most important of the list of issues on this page (http://latest.safeharbor.in/demo?autopilot=off#summary) and skip the rest. It's too much to read. Make the remaining issues bold.
Assigning to Lucas, but you may want to assign to Nicole for writing, and then to Paige for visual design and layout.
Generally, I feel like this demo ending should be a happy ending.
The page we see when the demo's complete is good, in that it attempts to reiterate what was just seen and to answer some questions a user may have, but it could use a bit more design and organization.
This is a design / copywriting issue. I think we could choose the 4 or 5 most important of the list of issues on this page (http://latest.safeharbor.in/demo?autopilot=off#summary) and skip the rest. It's too much to read. Make the remaining issues bold.
Assigning to Lucas, but you may want to assign to Nicole for writing, and then to Paige for visual design and layout.