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https://luceroweb.github.io/haunted-house-game/
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Clown Puppet text suggestions #116

Closed migriva closed 2 years ago

migriva commented 2 years ago

Environment

Device: Dell Precision 3560 Processor: 11th Gen Intel® Core™ i5-1135G7 @ 2.40GHz × 8 Browser: Google Chrome Version 95.0.4638.54 (Official Build) (64-bit) User type: User

Description

When encountering the Clown Puppet the user is presented with a scenario that may have grammatical errors.

Expected Behavior

The user expects that all text aspects of the game be clear and grammatically correct.

Actual Behavior

The Clown Puppet text can be construed as difficult to read due to syntax and grammar errors.

Steps to Reproduce Issue

  1. Go to website
  2. Navigate through game until you reach the Clown Puppet
  3. Read all of the text surrounding the Clown Puppet.

Screenshot

KillerClown_Grammar_Before

Notes

Following is a suggestion. This could possibly be an improvement to the flow of the Clown Puppet text.

"A puppet sits on a shelf, its head is facing away from you. As you enter the room the head slowly begins to spin around.

It's a Clown Puppet!!! The head stops turning, now it's facing you. The clown is holding something in its hand. You lunge at the clown puppet and it drops the object! It's a harmless smoke bomb!!! As green smoke fills the air you seize the opportunity to choose another way to overcome the Clown Puppet!!!"

ProjectErostribe commented 2 years ago

@migriva While I don't agree on the exact verbiage. I do like your ending "As green smoke fills the air you seize the opportunity to choose another way to overcome the Clown Puppet." so I made those changes.

migriva commented 2 years ago

Thank you for your input and your feedback. This is a great game your team created. I approach all suggestions respectfully and openly.

On Thu, Oct 28, 2021, 12:35 PM Paidamoyo Janet MYLES Azehko < @.***> wrote:

@migriva https://github.com/migriva While I don't agree on the exact verbiage. I do like your ending "As green smoke fills the air you seize the opportunity to choose another way to overcome the Clown Puppet." so I made those changes.

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luceroweb commented 2 years ago

@migriva is the issue resolved to your satisfaction? If so, we'd like to close this issue. Please let us know. cc @ProjectErostribe @lreyes-qae

migriva commented 2 years ago

Yes, it works!

On Fri, Oct 29, 2021, 8:46 AM luceroweb @.***> wrote:

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