Closed mbhall88 closed 2 years ago
It's good you're getting words down and finding your voice, but the abstract is too long. You just need to say what you're going to do. The intro is there to set the scene and explain why it is important.
Here's an example of what you could do
Genetic variation in bacterial genomes has a direct impact on their biology, and since they reproduce asexually, comparing genomes allows inference of relatedness. In the context of bacterial pathogens, this has important implications for global public health, empowering epidemiology and allowing prediction of antimicrobial drug resistance (amr).
A single reference genome is often used as a template to find variation, and this idea underlies the vast majority of bioinformatic approaches to studying genetic variation. I introduce this thesis by explaining why this approach is inadequate for bacteria, and describe a new approach to analyse bacterial genomes, based on a "pan-genome graph". In chapter 1, i describe algorithms for de novo assembly of genetic variation in the context of a pan-genome graph. The remaining chapters address an applied question: can nanopore sequence analysis of m tuberculosis genomes be used to provide high quality analysis for public health? To this end i collect data from south africa, madagascar and england. In chapter 2 i evaluate standard and graph-genome based methods for detecting potential outbreaks. In chapter 3 i address drug resistance prediction. in the final chapter i develop a tuberculosis-specific neural network model for base-calling nanopore data. Together this thesis addresses general methods for studying any bacterial species, and a specific question with potential impact for public health.
Man, it's so hard to summarise 4 years of work in a single page!
Thanks for the brutal feedback - the main thing I want to improve with my writing is being more succinct and you are very good at that.
Here is a PDF of my revised abstract abstract.pdf
@iqbal-lab a reminder I need this feedback before I can do 'Intention to submit'.
I re-read it just now and seem to remember you mentioning something about the opening sentence? I see what you mean, it could be better. Anyway I will fix that along with any other final comments you have,
have sent it on slack, but putting here also michael-abstract-draft-zam-comments.pdf
Normally after two rounds of review I wouldn't ask for another, but that last review caused some big changes, so I'll get you to take one last look if that's alright? Then I will do the Intention to submit.
Excellent
Well done!
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