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Feedback on Presentation #2

Open geekmlle opened 8 years ago

geekmlle commented 8 years ago

Hello team and @scharffc!

I'm here to give you guys some commentary on your presentation.

On Slide 2: My suggestion here is to place both images in the center and leave the text on the outer part of the images cause right now the slide looks a little imbalanced.

Slide 3: You can remove the dash (-) because you only have one bullet. Rephrase to: "As of now, we've published 5 games on Amazon, Google Play Store and Windows Phone"

Fix: "Confemen is an institution that promotes education in French speaking countries."

Slide 4: It would look a little better if both images were the same height and probably push them up a little because there is too much padding between the title and the top of the images and very little from the bottom of the slide to the images.

Slide 7: Rephrase "1 month so far" to "After a month's work:" It looks a little empty, maybe add a couple more lines of text to it? or an image? Also, if you will have a bulleted list, the first letter of each item should be capitalized or not, instead of having one capitalized and the other in small caps. Maybe you can change "looking for" for "Searching for"

Slide 8: Fix the word "innovation", it has double N In the first bullet: change Technologie for "Technology" and it sounds better when you change "Using" for "Use". Change the second bullet to: "Offer dynamic and interactive games based on each class program."

If you have any questions about my comments, let me know and we can clear out any doubts you have. It's a very nice presentation, and those graphics look amazing for a kids app! I'm sure they will enjoy looking at it and working through it! Good job everybody!

Diana

SerialNoob commented 8 years ago

@geekmlle Thanks for the feedback Diana , we made the changes you suggested and it do really looks much better . It would be great if you could also actually test the app and provide feedback :) we would be thrilled to have inputs from you about it , but we would need to go few changes first . We'll keep you posted about how it goes and get you a download link ASAP . Laurel.

geekmlle commented 8 years ago

@SerialNoob I'm glad my suggestions helped ^_^ Let me know when you have a working app so I can test it. I believe tomorrow I'll be able to get an Android device to play around with.